2024年6月大學(xué)英語四、六級作文試題評析（三）

四級

Directions： Suppose your university is seeking students’ opinions on whether university libraries should be open to the public. You are now to write an essay to express your view. You will have 30 minutes for the task. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學(xué)英語四級作文試題要求考生論述大學(xué)圖書館是否應(yīng)向公眾開放。關(guān)于這個(gè)話題，長期以來眾說紛紜，莫衷一是。所以考生以贊成或反對立論都可以，關(guān)鍵是要能自圓其說。

這篇作文可以寫三個(gè)段落。

第一段先提出本文要討論的話題——最近有一場關(guān)于大學(xué)圖書館是否應(yīng)向公眾開放的熱烈討論。然后提出自己的觀點(diǎn)：大學(xué)圖書館應(yīng)該為大學(xué)生和教職工專用，即大學(xué)圖書館不應(yīng)向公眾開放。

第二段論證自己的這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)。我們可以從三個(gè)方面展開論述。首先，大學(xué)圖書館是為了方便師生的學(xué)習(xí)和研究而建，其關(guān)注重點(diǎn)在于學(xué)術(shù)資料而不是娛樂，因此大學(xué)圖書館并不適合公眾。大多數(shù)公眾去圖書館的目的是自我娛樂。其次，由于大學(xué)生的數(shù)量迅速增加，圖書館為在校大學(xué)生服務(wù)已經(jīng)不堪重負(fù)，更無力接待社會(huì)上的讀者。最后是安全方面的考慮，允許公眾使用大學(xué)圖書館會(huì)產(chǎn)生安全隱患。

第三段總結(jié)全文，重述觀點(diǎn)。我們可以先指出，作為大學(xué)的心臟，大學(xué)圖書館應(yīng)當(dāng)優(yōu)先滿足教師和學(xué)生的需要，然后指出大學(xué)圖書館向公眾開放不可取。

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Recently there has been a heated debate as to whether university libraries should be open to the public. As far as I am concerned， libraries on campus should be for the exclusive use of college students and faculty members.

As we know， university libraries are built to facilitate the learning and research activities of college students and the faculty. So libraries on campus， whose focus is on academic materials rather than entertainment， are not suitable for the public， the majority of whom go to a library with the purpose of entertaining themselves. Also， university libraries， groaning under the burden of surging numbers of students， can hardly cope with swarms of non-student readers. College students already find it difficult to get a vacant seat in their libraries. Plus， allowing the public to have access to university libraries would create potential safety hazards.

As the heart of a university， the library’s priority is to meet students’ and teachers’ needs. I think it is undesirable that university libraries be open to the general public. （171 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. As far as I am concerned， libraries on campus should be for the exclusive use of college students and faculty members. 在我看來，校園里的圖書館應(yīng)當(dāng)為大學(xué)生和教職工專用。 as/so far as I am concerned依我看。這是一個(gè)表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的常用說法。

2. So libraries on campus， whose focus is on academic materials rather than entertainment， are not suitable for the public， the majority of whom go to a library with the purpose of entertaining themselves. 學(xué)校圖書館關(guān)注的重點(diǎn)是學(xué)術(shù)資料而不是娛樂，并不適合公眾，因?yàn)榇蠖鄶?shù)公眾去圖書館的目的是自我娛樂。

3. Also， university libraries， groaning under the burden of surging numbers of students， can hardly cope with swarms of non-student readers. 此外，在大學(xué)生人數(shù)激增的重負(fù)下，大學(xué)圖書館已經(jīng)喘不過氣來，幾乎無力應(yīng)對社會(huì)上的大批讀者。 groaning 是現(xiàn)在分詞作定語，修飾university libraries。cope with 應(yīng)對。

4. I think it is undesirable that university libraries be open to the general public. 我認(rèn)為大學(xué)圖書館向公眾開放不可取。it is undesirable that... ……不可取。后面的從句要使用虛擬語氣，即should后跟動(dòng)詞原形，should可省。

六級

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “Nowadays cultivating independent learning ability is becoming increasingly important for personal development.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

這道大學(xué)英語六級作文試題要求考生根據(jù)題目提供的開篇句寫一篇作文。這個(gè)開篇句本身又表達(dá)了文章的中心論點(diǎn)。本題中的論點(diǎn)是培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力對個(gè)人的發(fā)展變得越來越重要。由于學(xué)生時(shí)代是培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力的重要時(shí)期，所以我們在論述時(shí)不妨密切地聯(lián)系學(xué)生。

這篇作文可以寫三個(gè)段落。

第一段先指出培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力對個(gè)人發(fā)展變得越來越重要，然后援引約翰斯·霍普金斯大學(xué)最近所做的一項(xiàng)研究來支撐這個(gè)論點(diǎn)——獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力使學(xué)生成為終生學(xué)習(xí)者，并使他們具備未來獲得成功所需要的重要技能。

第二段論述獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力對個(gè)人發(fā)展的重要作用。我們不妨從校園和職場這兩個(gè)方面展開論述。首先，在當(dāng)今世界人們能夠方便地獲得信息，因此獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力比以往任何時(shí)候都更加重要。學(xué)生如果具備了獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)的能力，就能自由地探索自己感興趣的話題并按照自己的節(jié)奏學(xué)習(xí)。這種個(gè)性化的學(xué)習(xí)方法能夠讓學(xué)生學(xué)業(yè)出色。其次，通過獨(dú)立地參與學(xué)習(xí)過程，學(xué)生會(huì)培養(yǎng)一些重要的技能，如批判思考、解決問題和自我管理。這些技能在職場上也很受重視，有助于他們在今后的事業(yè)中取得成功?？傊?，只有善于從不同的方面展開論述，我們才能使論證充分翔實(shí)，并保證字?jǐn)?shù)達(dá)到要求。

本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾，即第三段提出解決問題的建議。先引用諺語重述獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力的重要性：授人以魚，不如授人以漁。然后建議中小學(xué)和大學(xué)培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力，以便他們能夠應(yīng)對未來在學(xué)習(xí)、事業(yè)和人生中的挑戰(zhàn)。

下面請看參考范文：

Nowadays cultivating independent learning ability is becoming increasingly important for personal development. A recent Johns Hopkins University study suggests that independent learning ability prepares students for lifelong learning and equips them with essential skills for future success.

In today’s world， where information is readily available at your fingertips， the ability to learn on your own is more important than ever before. When learning independently， students have the freedom to explore topics of personal interest and learn at their own pace. This personalized approach will help students shine academically. On top of that， by participating in the learning process independently， students develop important skills such as critical thinking， problem-solving and self-management， which are also highly valued in the professional world， thus contributing to their success later in the workplace.

Give a man a fish and you’ll feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish and you’ll feed him for a lifetime. So it is imperative that schools and universities develop independent learning skills in their students so that they are well equipped for their future learning， career and life challenges. （181 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. A recent Johns Hopkins University study suggests that independent learning ability prepares students for lifelong learning and equips them with essential skills for future success. 約翰斯·霍普金斯大學(xué)最近所做的一項(xiàng)研究顯示，獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力讓學(xué)生成為終生學(xué)習(xí)者，并讓他們具備未來獲得成功所需的重要技能。 suggest 顯示。equip sb with 使某人具備（某種技能等）。

2. In today’s world， where information is readily available at your fingertips， the ability to learn on your own is more important than ever before. 在當(dāng)今世界，信息唾手可得，因此獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力比以往任何時(shí)候都更加重要。be readily available at one’s fingertips 唾手可得。on one’s own 獨(dú)立地。

3. This personalized approach will help students shine academically. 這種個(gè)性化的學(xué)習(xí)方法有助于學(xué)生取得出色的成績。personalized 個(gè)性化的。shine 表現(xiàn)突出，出類拔萃。

4. So it is imperative that schools and universities develop independent learning skills in their students so that they are well equipped for their future learning， career and life challenges. 所以中小學(xué)和大學(xué)必須培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)能力，以便他們有能力應(yīng)對未來在學(xué)習(xí)、事業(yè)和人生中的挑戰(zhàn)。it is imperative that... 當(dāng)務(wù)之急是……。這是一個(gè)提建議的常用句型，后面的從句要用虛擬語氣。be well equipped for" 為……做好準(zhǔn)備。

* 上海外國語大學(xué)國際新聞碩士，講師，專注大學(xué)英語寫作教學(xué)十余年。