2024年6月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四、六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析（一）

四級(jí)

Directions： Suppose your university is seeking students’ opinions on whether university canteens should be open to the public. You are now to write an essay to express your view. You will have 30 minutes for the task. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文試題要求考生論述大學(xué)食堂是否應(yīng)當(dāng)向公眾開(kāi)放?？忌鷮?duì)這個(gè)問(wèn)題的回答就是文章的論點(diǎn)。論點(diǎn)本身并不重要，考生的回答既可以是肯定的，也可以是否定的，關(guān)鍵是要能自圓其說(shuō)。

本文宜寫(xiě)三個(gè)段落。第一段先提出所要討論的話題，然后亮出自己的觀點(diǎn)——大學(xué)食堂應(yīng)當(dāng)為大學(xué)生和教職工專用，即大學(xué)食堂不應(yīng)向公眾開(kāi)放。第二段論證自己的這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)。我們不妨從三個(gè)方面展開(kāi)。首先，食堂不僅僅是一個(gè)吃飯的地方，它還是一個(gè)學(xué)生放松、恢復(fù)精力和培養(yǎng)歸屬感的空間。因此，學(xué)校食堂必須保持安靜和清潔，不受任何干擾。其次，食堂的空間有限，在就餐高峰時(shí)段連大學(xué)生都覺(jué)得難以找到空位，所以大學(xué)食堂無(wú)法容納大批社會(huì)上的就餐者。最后還有安全方面的擔(dān)憂。在向社會(huì)開(kāi)放的大學(xué)食堂里，大學(xué)生經(jīng)常發(fā)現(xiàn)他們的包或手機(jī)被偷。第三段先指出學(xué)校食堂除了向?qū)W生提供有營(yíng)養(yǎng)的食物，它還是一個(gè)學(xué)生聚會(huì)和培養(yǎng)歸屬感的社交中心。然后水到渠成地重述觀點(diǎn)：大學(xué)食堂似乎不應(yīng)向公眾開(kāi)放。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

Should university canteens be open to the public？ This is a topic heatedly discussed on campus recently. As far as I can see， school cafeterias should be exclusively for college students and faculty members.

Canteens are more than just a place to eat. It’s a space where students relax， recharge and build a sense of community. So it is necessary to keep the university canteen quiet and clean， free from any disruption. Another reason is school canteens’ limited space， which is hardly adequate to accommodate swarms of non-student diners. College students already find it difficult to find a vacant seat in canteens during peak hours. There are also safety concerns. It is not uncommon to hear college students find their bags or mobile phones stolen in school dining halls accessible to the public.

Apart from offering students nutritious food， canteens serve as a social hub where students can gather together and foster a sense of belonging. It seems to me that university cafeterias should not be open to the general public. （171 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. As far as I can see， school cafeterias should be exclusively for college students and faculty members. 依我看，學(xué)校食堂應(yīng)當(dāng)為大學(xué)生和教職工專用。as far as I can see依我看。exclusively僅僅，專門地。

2. Another reason is school canteens’ limited space， which is hardly adequate to accommodate swarms of non-student diners.另一個(gè)原因是學(xué)校食堂的空間有限，這使得它們幾乎不能容納大批的校外就餐者。swarms of成群的，大批的。

3. It is not uncommon to hear college students find their bags or mobile phones stolen in school dining halls accessible to the public. 在向公眾開(kāi)放的學(xué)校食堂里，經(jīng)常聽(tīng)說(shuō)大學(xué)生發(fā)現(xiàn)他們的包或手機(jī)被偷?！癐t is not uncommon to hear…”（經(jīng)常聽(tīng)說(shuō)……）是一個(gè)雙重否定結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)肯定的意思。

4. Apart from offering students nutritious food， canteens serve as a social hub where students can gather together and foster a sense of belonging. 除了向?qū)W生提供營(yíng)養(yǎng)豐富的食物，食堂還是一個(gè)社交中心，學(xué)生可以在那里聚會(huì)并培養(yǎng)歸屬感。apart from除了……（外）還。serve as用作。

六級(jí)

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “Nowadays more and more college students have come to realize social practice and academic learning are equally important.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)六級(jí)作文試題屬于闡釋觀點(diǎn)型。此類型題目的特點(diǎn)是：提出一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，請(qǐng)考生論證這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的正確性。本題要求考生論證的觀點(diǎn)是社會(huì)實(shí)踐與專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)同樣重要。我們?cè)趯忣}時(shí)要善于簡(jiǎn)化題目，透過(guò)復(fù)雜的表述看到題目的本質(zhì)。由于專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)對(duì)大學(xué)生的重要性已經(jīng)深入人心、不言而喻，本文需要重點(diǎn)論述的是社會(huì)實(shí)踐對(duì)大學(xué)生的重要性。我們抓住了這個(gè)關(guān)鍵，寫(xiě)作思路就會(huì)清晰起來(lái)：從社會(huì)實(shí)踐對(duì)大學(xué)生的重要性的角度展開(kāi)論證。

本文可以寫(xiě)三個(gè)段落。第一段先提出論點(diǎn)——如今越來(lái)越多的大學(xué)生開(kāi)始意識(shí)到社會(huì)實(shí)踐與專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)同樣重要。然后我們?cè)僖妹襟w上的大量報(bào)道佐證這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，此為破題。

第二段論述社會(huì)實(shí)踐對(duì)大學(xué)生的重要性。我們可以從兩個(gè)方面展開(kāi)論證。首先，大學(xué)生參加社會(huì)實(shí)踐能夠獲得現(xiàn)實(shí)世界的經(jīng)驗(yàn)并培養(yǎng)他們的工作技能。由于社會(huì)實(shí)踐的種類繁多，我們不妨以兼職工作和志愿者工作為例談參加社會(huì)實(shí)踐的益處。首先，大學(xué)生無(wú)論是在餐館里當(dāng)服務(wù)員，還是在養(yǎng)老院里照顧老人，都能培養(yǎng)一些工作技能，如交流、團(tuán)隊(duì)合作、時(shí)間管理和解決問(wèn)題等。這樣，當(dāng)他們走上工作崗位時(shí)就會(huì)比別人領(lǐng)先一步。其次，社會(huì)實(shí)踐還讓大學(xué)生有機(jī)會(huì)把課堂學(xué)到的知識(shí)應(yīng)用到實(shí)際工作中，這反過(guò)來(lái)又會(huì)促進(jìn)他們的專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)。

本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾。第三段先承認(rèn)專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)在大學(xué)生活中很重要，接著指出社會(huì)實(shí)踐是大學(xué)生培養(yǎng)工作技能和了解現(xiàn)實(shí)世界的關(guān)鍵，最后建議大學(xué)生在專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)和社會(huì)實(shí)踐之間找到適當(dāng)?shù)钠胶?。下面?qǐng)看參考范文：

Nowadays more and more college students have come to realize social practice and academic learning are equally important. Stories abound in the media that an increasing number of students are actively involved in social practice while at college.

Participating in social practice helps college students gain real-world experience and develop work-related skills. For instance， whether it be waiting tables at a restaurant or caring for the elderly in a nursing home， social practice helps young people develop such skills as communication， teamwork， time-management and problem-solving. They will be one step ahead when it comes to entering the workplace， already equipped with some of the key skills needed for the role. On top of that， social practice gives college students the opportunity to put what they learned in the classroom into actual work， which， in turn， promotes their academic learning.

Academic pursuits are important in university students’ school life， but social practice is crucial for them to build job skills and know the real world. So it is advised that college students find the right balance between academic learning and social practice. （181 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. Stories abound in the media that an increasing number of students are actively involved in social practice while at college. 媒體上有大量的報(bào)道，說(shuō)越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生在上大學(xué)期間積極參加社會(huì)實(shí)踐。story新聞報(bào)道。abound大量存在，有許多。while at college（在上大學(xué)期間）是時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的省略結(jié)構(gòu)，省略了從句的主語(yǔ)they和are。

2. For instance， whether it be waiting tables at a restaurant or caring for the elderly in a nursing home， social practice helps young people develop such skills as communication， teamwork， time-management and problem-solving. 比如，無(wú)論是在餐館里當(dāng)服務(wù)員還是在養(yǎng)老院里照顧老人，社會(huì)實(shí)踐幫助年輕人培養(yǎng)諸如交流、團(tuán)隊(duì)合作、時(shí)間管理和解決問(wèn)題之類的技能。whether引導(dǎo)的是一個(gè)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。這種從句既可以用陳述語(yǔ)氣，也可以用虛擬語(yǔ)氣。

3. They will be one step ahead when it comes to entering the workplace， already equipped with some of the key skills needed for the role. 因?yàn)橐呀?jīng)具備了工作中需要的一些重要技能，他們?cè)谶M(jìn)入職場(chǎng)時(shí)會(huì)領(lǐng)先一步。equipped with是一個(gè)過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)，做狀語(yǔ)，表示原因。

4. So it is advised that college students find the right balance between academic learning and social practice. 所以建議大學(xué)生在專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)和社會(huì)實(shí)踐之間找到適當(dāng)?shù)钠胶?。“it is advised that…”是一個(gè)提建議的常用句型，后面的從句要使用虛擬語(yǔ)氣，即謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞使用should跟原形動(dòng)詞，should可以省略。

* 上海外國(guó)語(yǔ)大學(xué)國(guó)際新聞碩士，講師，專注大學(xué)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作教學(xué)十余年。