經(jīng)歷敘述六步法

敘述經(jīng)歷是廣東高考讀寫任務(wù)中常見的寫作要點(diǎn)，但是很多高三學(xué)生在寫作這類要點(diǎn)時(shí)會(huì)感覺很棘手，要么敘述得太詳細(xì)，導(dǎo)致整篇文章各個(gè)段落的篇幅比例嚴(yán)重失調(diào);要么不能在有限的篇幅之內(nèi)突出主題。據(jù)此，筆者結(jié)合多年的高三教學(xué)經(jīng)驗(yàn)，總結(jié)出了敘述經(jīng)歷類要點(diǎn)寫作六步法，并歸納了每一步的經(jīng)典表達(dá)，希望對(duì)緊張備考的高三學(xué)子有所幫助。

步驟與經(jīng)典句式

第1步：引出故事、經(jīng)歷

●On reading the story， my mind began its search for a similar experience. 讀了這個(gè)故事，我的頭腦開始搜尋類似的經(jīng)歷

●What an unbelievable/ an embarrassing/a fantastic/a delighting experience it is！In my case， I have ever faced the same situation. 真是一次多么令人難以置信的/令人尷尬的/奇妙的/令人愉快的/經(jīng)歷！我曾面臨同樣的情況。

●The story above reminds me of an unforgettable experience.上述故事讓我想起了一次令人難忘的經(jīng)歷。

第2步： 交代故事的開端

●The other day， I was doing sth. when... 不久前有一天，我正在做……突然……

●There was a time when... 曾有一段時(shí)間……

第3步： 推動(dòng)故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展

●To make things worse， ... 更糟的是……

●What’s worse， ...更糟的是……

第4步： 故事的高潮

●At this very moment， ... 此時(shí)此刻……

●All of a sudden， ... 突然/出乎意料地……

●On the contrary，...恰恰相反……

●Luckily /Unfortunately， ...幸運(yùn)的是/不幸的是……

第5步： 故事的結(jié)局

●Eventually， ... "終于……

●Not only did sb. do... but sb. also did... 不但……而且……

●So lucky was I that... 我如此幸運(yùn)，以致……

●It is not until... that.... 直到……才……

第6步： 升華

如果下一個(gè)要點(diǎn)就是談感想，這點(diǎn)可以省去。

●What impressed me most is that... 給我印象最深的是……

●I have learned from the story that... 從這個(gè)故事里我學(xué)到了……

●I have gained much from this experience. 從這次經(jīng)歷中我學(xué)到了許多

●From this experience， I learn /realize that no matter...， I’ll always... 從這次經(jīng)歷中，我學(xué)到了/意識(shí)到，不管……我總會(huì)……

高考鏈接

以你自己成長(zhǎng)的經(jīng)歷說明你（讀信后）的感受（2007廣東高考）

經(jīng)典示范

（引入）Your letter reminds me of an unforgettable experience. （開端）When I was in primary school， I failed to concentrate my efforts on study and was addicted to computer games. （發(fā)展）As a consequence， I soon became the last in my class. （高潮）On hearing the bad news， you didn’t blame me at all. On the contrary， you made me understand that studying was the most important task during that time and encouraged me to study diligently. （結(jié)局）Eventually， I managed to quit my bad habit.（升華）Only when I read your letter did I realize you were so sad to see I behaved so badly at that time.

小試牛刀

1. 敘述你自己或朋友一次以幽默方式走出困境的真實(shí)或虛構(gòu)的經(jīng)歷。

2. 敘述自己或身邊現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中中學(xué)生夢(mèng)想成真的一件事例。

參考范文

1. （引入）When it comes to getting out of a trap in a humorous way， my mind begins its search for such an example. （開端） Once， my friend Mark was supposed to deliver a speech in our school. （發(fā)展）However， he was a bit nervous and something was wrong with the microphone when he shouted excitedly. （高潮）Obviously， he was embarrassed but the sense of humor helped him out. After changing the microphone， he immediately smiled and said， “Please forgive me. My enthusiasm is so strong that it burnt the microphone.” （結(jié)局）All the students burst into laughter and the embarrassment was dissolved.

2.（引入）The passage reminds me of my own experience. "（開端）When in senior one， I dreamed of playing computer games but I didn’t own a computer.（發(fā)展）Seeing my trouble， my friend encouraged me to fly my dream by taking a part-time job. Then I accepted his advice and worked in a small shop as a shopkeeper after school. （高潮）To be honest， it was the hardest time that I have ever had， but I enjoyed it. （結(jié)局）After one year’s hard work， I earned enough money and bought my own computer. I burst into tears because I let my dream fly.

（作者單位：廣州市真光中學(xué)）

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