The unfinished business finished 夙愿終成真

袁丹純

For many years， I had a recurring （重復(fù)出現(xiàn)的） dream in which I was still a little girl， with books carried in my arm， ready to go to school. Deep inside， I knew where the dream came from. It was about some unfinished business in my life. As a kid， I loved everything about school. Most of all， I longed to receive my diploma （畢業(yè)證書(shū)）.

But at 15， I had to drop out because my parents couldnt afford tuition. My hope of getting a diploma was gone. Pretty soon， I married and had three children whom I wanted to be educated. But Linda， our youngest child， had juvenile arthritis （幼年型關(guān)節(jié)炎） in her hands， which made it impossible for her in a normal classroom. But I did not want her to live with regrets as I did. It was then that I saw an ad in the newspaper for evening courses. So I signed her up for the night school.

Surprisingly， when Linda was filling out enrollment （入學(xué)） forms， the secretary said to me， “Mrs Schantz， why dont you come back to school？” I laughed， “Theres no way！ Im 55！” But he persisted， and before I knew what I had done， I was enrolled for classes in Eng?

lish. I told myself to try for just a semester and to see if it would work. Anyway， my dream was still there in my heart.

It was exciting to go to school again， but it was not a game. Sitting in a classroom full of kids was awkward， even if most of them were respectful and encouraging. During the day， I was still a busy married woman with loads of housework to do. In the evening， I was a hard?working student working on my courses. To my surprise， both Linda and I did very well in night school. I went back again the next semester， with my grades steadily improving.

I have to say the evening courses were not easy for both of us. But neither of us gave up. At last， I got my diploma. Whats more， I got a $3，000 college scholarship thanks to my excellent academic performance. The unfinished business in my dreams was eventually finished.

Activity A Reading for understanding

Ⅰ. Text?centered chunks

drop out 輟學(xué)

with regrets 帶著遺憾

be enrolled for 被錄取

Ⅱ. Text?centered sentences

一、with sth doing/done/to do

1. For many years， I had a recurring dream in which I was still a little girl， with books carried in my arm， ready to go to school. 很多年來(lái)，我重復(fù)做著同樣一個(gè)夢(mèng)，在夢(mèng)里我還是一個(gè)小女孩，懷里抱著書(shū)準(zhǔn)備上學(xué)。

【點(diǎn)石成金】with books carried in my arm表示“懷里抱著書(shū)”，是“with+賓語(yǔ)+過(guò)去分詞”結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“某事/某人被……的狀態(tài)”。

【運(yùn)用遷移】?jī)词直粠нM(jìn)來(lái)，手被綁在背后。

2. I was still a busy married woman with loads of housework to do. 我仍然是一個(gè)需要做大量家務(wù)的忙碌的已婚婦女。

【點(diǎn)石成金】with loads of housework to do表示“有大量的家務(wù)需要做”，是“with+賓語(yǔ)+to do”結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“有……要做”。

【運(yùn)用遷移】有很多問(wèn)題需要解決，剛剛選上的總統(tǒng)正面臨難關(guān)。

3. I went back again the next semester， with my grades steadily improving. 我第二學(xué)期又回去上課，成績(jī)?cè)诓粩嗟剡M(jìn)步。

【點(diǎn)石成金】with my grades steadily improving表示“我的成績(jī)?cè)诓粩嗟剡M(jìn)步”，是“with+賓語(yǔ)+doing”結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“有某事/某人做……”。

【運(yùn)用遷移】沒(méi)有人注意的時(shí)候，我偷偷地走進(jìn)了房間。

二、非限制性定語(yǔ)從句

But Linda， our youngest child， had juvenile arthritis in her hands， which made it im?

possible for her in a normal classroom. 但是我們最小的孩子琳達(dá)手部患有幼年型關(guān)節(jié)炎，這使得她上不了普通的學(xué)校。

【點(diǎn)石成金】which made it impossible for her in a normal classroom是非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，其中，make it impossible中的it是形式賓語(yǔ)，指代后面真正的賓語(yǔ) in a normal classroom。

【運(yùn)用遷移】它在一年內(nèi)就被建成了，這簡(jiǎn)直令人難以置信。

Activity B Reading for writing

一家英語(yǔ)報(bào)社正在面向中學(xué)生征文，主題是“My dream”。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)和你的暢想完成短文。

1.你的夢(mèng)想是什么;

2.你的打算。

注意：

1.詞數(shù)80左右;

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;

3.至少使用一個(gè)“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ);

4.注意段落內(nèi)的邏輯關(guān)系。

My dream

寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引

本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是寫(xiě)一篇表達(dá)計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文，要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)出自己的夢(mèng)想以及描述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想，并且至少使用一個(gè)“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ)，這些寫(xiě)作要求和所給語(yǔ)篇的主題語(yǔ)境是緊密相關(guān)的。我們可以通過(guò)整合同主題閱讀材料的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言，梳理寫(xiě)作思路和積累素材。

一、語(yǔ)篇解碼

（一）內(nèi)容分析

What is the text mainly about？

（二）宏觀結(jié)構(gòu)

Fill in the blanks according to the text.

二、素材積累

本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是基于同一主題的文章閱讀下的寫(xiě)作，我們可以通過(guò)模仿并運(yùn)用文章中的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)，如詞塊和句型，積累寫(xiě)作的語(yǔ)言素材。

（一）計(jì)劃與愿望的核心短語(yǔ)

1. feel like doing sth 想要做某事

2. be eager/anxious/dying for 渴望……

3. make arrangements for 為……做準(zhǔn)備

4. have a desire to do 渴望做……

5. with the hope/aim of 帶著……的希望/目的

6. draw near/around the corner/be approaching 即將到來(lái)

7. take on a new look呈現(xiàn)新面貌

（二）計(jì)劃與愿望的核心句型

1. Realizing the benefits and importance of this activity， I have a strong desire to participate in it.

意識(shí)到本次活動(dòng)的益處和重要性，我強(qiáng)烈希望參與其中。

2. As a child， I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could contribute to the construction of our country.

小時(shí)候，我總是希望自己快點(diǎn)長(zhǎng)大，以便我能為祖國(guó)的建設(shè)做貢獻(xiàn)。

3. Im determined to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save peoples lives， but also they can help people live a better life with their professional knowledge.

我決心成為一名醫(yī)生。醫(yī)生不僅能挽救人們的生命，而且他們可以用他們的專業(yè)知識(shí)來(lái)幫助人們過(guò)更好的生活。

4. I will make a 15?day tour of Britain after my graduation from senior high school this summer， which will be a good chance for me to experience British culture and practice my oral English.

今年夏天高中畢業(yè)后，我將去英國(guó)進(jìn)行為期15天的觀光旅游，對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō)，這將是一次體驗(yàn)英國(guó)文化、練習(xí)英語(yǔ)口語(yǔ)的好機(jī)會(huì)。

三、寫(xiě)作支架

本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文。根據(jù)任務(wù)中的要求，語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)可定為“提出愿望+如何實(shí)施”。文章的框架如下：

I have longed to... since I was... years old because I feel like... Not only can... but also... In my eyes， it will be a good chance for me to...

In order to realize my dream， here is what I will do. First， it would be a great way to do... In addition， I had better... Last but not least， it would not be a bad idea if I keep doing...

四、語(yǔ)篇過(guò)手

根據(jù)以上提供的主題、主題表達(dá)和語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)，寫(xiě)出表達(dá)計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文。第一段提出自己的夢(mèng)想，第二段描述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想?？傇~數(shù)控制在80左右。

同時(shí)，學(xué)習(xí)運(yùn)用前文閱讀中出現(xiàn)的“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ)。注意表達(dá)的內(nèi)在邏輯關(guān)系，需要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞。