鄧霞
◎情境呈現(xiàn)
(2020年山東卷)假定你是李華, 上周日你校舉辦了5公里越野賽跑活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你為校英文報(bào)寫一篇報(bào)道, 內(nèi)容包括:
1. 參加人員;
2. 跑步路線:從校門口到南山腳下;
3. 活動(dòng)反響。
注意:寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右。
A Cross?Country Running Race
◎?qū)懽鲗?dǎo)引
一、文體分析
今年的山東高考小作文一改往日的書信形式,出現(xiàn)了新聞報(bào)道,這使很多學(xué)生措手不及,主要是大家平時(shí)沒有練過(guò)這種文體。
新聞報(bào)道實(shí)際上是敘述類文本的一種,它以事實(shí)為依據(jù),用簡(jiǎn)明扼要的文字把發(fā)生的事件陳述、報(bào)道出來(lái)。在新聞報(bào)道中,主體時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)。雖然新聞報(bào)道會(huì)因報(bào)道內(nèi)容的不同有不同的側(cè)重點(diǎn),但在模式上還是有規(guī)律可循的,它們通常會(huì)采用“倒金字塔式”的結(jié)構(gòu),把核心的信息放在導(dǎo)語(yǔ)中。其結(jié)構(gòu)一般為:
1. 標(biāo)題:對(duì)新聞的概括、提煉或濃縮。
2. 導(dǎo)語(yǔ):首段,往往是一句話,即全文的主題句(topic sentence),一般是點(diǎn)明事件(what)、時(shí)間(when)、地點(diǎn)(where)與人物(who)。如果是一項(xiàng)活動(dòng),往往用in order to...說(shuō)明目的。
3. 正文:詳細(xì)記敘事件的過(guò)程和細(xì)節(jié)的部分,是新聞報(bào)道的主體。語(yǔ)言一般簡(jiǎn)練、精確、易懂。
4. 尾段:談?wù)摶顒?dòng)或事件的反響、評(píng)價(jià)或意義。但應(yīng)注意的是,對(duì)事件的評(píng)價(jià)一般不是由新聞報(bào)道人發(fā)出,而是引用第三方的觀點(diǎn)。
5. 落款或署名。也可沒有。
寫作模板
二、素材搜索
本次寫作的話題屬于日?;顒?dòng)。與學(xué)生有關(guān)的日常活動(dòng)主要包括學(xué)習(xí)、體育鍛煉、閱讀、寫作、校園賽事與師生交往等。本次寫作屬于“體育鍛煉”的范圍。
1. 話題詞匯
meaningful 有意義的
race 賽跑
campus life 校園生活
go hiking 去遠(yuǎn)足
relax 放松
organize a cross?country running race 組織一次越野賽跑活動(dòng)
nature自然
take photos 拍照
take part in 參加
participate in 參加
get first place 獲得第一名
set out/set off 出發(fā)
get together 聚集
feel tired/excited 感到疲倦/興奮
make it eight in the morning 把時(shí)間定在上午八點(diǎn)
arrive in/at 到達(dá)
build a positive attitude towards life 建立積極的生活態(tài)度
2. 寫作佳句
活動(dòng)目的和事件
(1)為了豐富我們的校園生活,上周日學(xué)校舉辦了一次5千米越野賽跑活動(dòng)。
→In order to enrich our campus life, our school organized a 5 km cross?country running race last Sunday.
→With the intention of enriching our campus life, our school organized a 5 km cross?country running race last Sunday.
(2)為了增強(qiáng)學(xué)生的身體素質(zhì),我們學(xué)校組織了一次“校園勞動(dòng)周”活動(dòng)。
In order to enhance students physical quality, our school organized a “Campus Labor Week” activity.
(3)為了鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生們走進(jìn)自然,我們學(xué)校組織了一次登山活動(dòng)。
In order to encourage the students to get close to nature, our school organized a mountain?climbing activity.
活動(dòng)內(nèi)容
(1)勞動(dòng)周是5月15日至19日。第一天有勞動(dòng)技能課,我們從中受益匪淺。修剪樹木和澆花很受高一學(xué)生歡迎。
It was held from May 15th to 19th in our school. Some lectures on labor skills were given on the first day, from which we benefited a lot. Cutting trees and watering flowers were attractive to Senior One.
(2)參加者9點(diǎn)從學(xué)校門口出發(fā),穿過(guò)人民公園,最后到達(dá)南山腳下。
Participants set out at 9:00 am from the gate of the school, raced through the Renmin Park, and finally arrived at the foot of Nanshan Mountain.
(3)今天是5月10號(hào),我們學(xué)校組織了一次郊游活動(dòng)——爬大青山,這座山離我們學(xué)校大約50公里。
Today is May 10th, and our school organized an outing for us—climbing Daqing Mountain, which is about fifty kilometers away from our school.
(4)我們6點(diǎn)出發(fā),花了4個(gè)多小時(shí)才到那兒。
We set off early at six in the morning and it took us more than four hours to get there.
(5)通常,我們上午進(jìn)行2個(gè)小時(shí)的活動(dòng),大約從8:00到10:00.
We generally have 2 hours of activities in the morning roughly from 8:00 to 10:00.
活動(dòng)的意義
(1)這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)對(duì)我們很有益處。
The activity benefited us a lot./The activity was of great benefit to us./The activity was very beneficial to us.
(2)除了學(xué)到知識(shí)外,我們也學(xué)會(huì)了與別人合作,并且意識(shí)到了合作的重要性。
Apart from knowledge, we also learned to cooperate with each other and came to realize the importance of teamwork.
(3)這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)不僅可以強(qiáng)身健體,而且增強(qiáng)了我們的勞動(dòng)意識(shí)。
The activity not only built up our body, but also enhanced our awareness of labor.
(4)我們感覺到這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)不僅促進(jìn)了我們的身心健康,而且?guī)椭覀儤淞⒘朔e極的人生態(tài)度。
We felt that not only did the event improve our physical and psychological quality, but it also helped us build a positive attitude towards life.
(5)毫無(wú)疑問(wèn),這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)不僅能豐富我們的學(xué)校生活,而且為我們提供了學(xué)習(xí)更多日常實(shí)踐技能的機(jī)會(huì)。
Undoubtedly, not only can this event enrich our school life but also offer us opportunities to learn more daily practical skills!
(6)盡管很累,但我們深感自豪,因?yàn)槲覀兯龅氖虑椴粌H僅給別人帶去了快樂(lè),也豐富了自己的人生。
Tired as we were, we felt so proud, for what we did not only brought joy to others, but also enriched our own lives.
結(jié)尾
希望我們學(xué)校今后多舉行這樣的活動(dòng)。
→We are in the hope that our school will carry out more similar activities in the future.
→We do hope that our school will carry out more similar activities in the future.
3. 審題立意
[文體 新聞報(bào)道——越野賽跑活動(dòng)
寫作要點(diǎn)
1. 參加人員
2. 跑步路線:從校門口到南山腳下
3. 活動(dòng)反響
時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用 以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主 篇幅要求 80詞左右(有效區(qū)間為64~96詞) 人稱使用 第一人稱 ]◎參考范文
A Cross?Country Running Race
To enrich our campus life, our school organized a 5 km cross?country running race last Sunday.
Ninety students from twenty classes participated in the race, among whom thirty were girls. Participants set out at 9:00 am from the gate of the school, raced through the Renmin Park, and finally reached the foot of Nanshan Mountain. After the race, we felt that not only did the event improve our physical and psychological quality, but it also helped us build a positive attitude towards life.
We do hope that more similar activities will be carried out in the future.
◎?qū)懽髟u(píng)估
◎類文加練
新華中學(xué)近期組織了“校園勞動(dòng)周”(Campus Labor Week)活動(dòng)。假定你是學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)記者,請(qǐng)就該活動(dòng)寫一篇簡(jiǎn)短的英文報(bào)道。內(nèi)容包括:
1. 活動(dòng)的時(shí)間與地點(diǎn);
2. 活動(dòng)的過(guò)程;
3. 活動(dòng)感受。
注意:
1. 詞數(shù)100左右;
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。