2020年考研英語（二）作文試題評析

賈從永

一、小作文

Directions：

Suppose you are planning a tour of historical site for a group of international students. Write them an email to

1） say something about the site， and

2） give them some tips for the tour.

You should write about 100 words neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. Do not use your own name at the end of the email. Use “Li Ming” instead. Do not write the address. （10 points）

本題假設(shè)考生正準(zhǔn)備組織留學(xué)生去一處歷史古跡游覽，要求考生給留學(xué)生們寫一封電子郵件，介紹一下該歷史古跡，并給他們一些游覽建議。電子郵件的格式與書信相同，都是從稱呼寫起。由于這封郵件是寫給留學(xué)生們的，所以稱呼不妨寫Dear friends。稱呼要頂格寫，后面用逗號。

這封電子郵件的正文可以寫成三段。第一段表明寫這封電子郵件的目的——通知留學(xué)生下周六要去一處歷史古跡游覽。這道作文題目中有兩個交際任務(wù)需要完成，但這兩個任務(wù)應(yīng)有所側(cè)重，突出重點(diǎn)。我們宜把介紹該歷史古跡作為重點(diǎn)在第二段中詳細(xì)展開。第三段簡要地向留學(xué)生提兩點(diǎn)游覽提示，并留下聯(lián)系方式。郵件的最后是署名，寫在正文下方中間偏右的位置，分兩行書寫，上一行可寫Yours sincerely，下一行寫Li Ming，上下對齊。下面請看參考范文：

Dear friends，

I am writing to inform you that we are going to visit the Yuyuan Garden on December 28. The tour is part of the program designed for you to experience Chinese culture.

Built in the Ming Dynasty， the 400-year-old Yuyuan Garden sprawls over 20，000 square meters. It is celebrated for its classical architecture， quaint furniture and exquisite brick-carving. Dotted with ponds， pavilions and rockery， it is known as a jewel of gardens in regions south of the Yangtze River.

Please wait at the main gate of our university at 8：00 a.m.， December 28. We will go there by coach. You can reach me at 12345678910 if you have any questions.

Yours sincerely，

Li Ming （116 words）

二、大作文

Directions：

Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing， you should

1） interpret the chart， and

2） give your comments.

You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. （15 points）

我們在寫這篇圖表作文之前要仔細(xì)讀圖。首先，圖表的標(biāo)題是“某高校學(xué)生手機(jī)閱讀使用情況”，所以我們要把本文的討論范圍限制在大學(xué)生使用手機(jī)進(jìn)行閱讀的方面。其次，我們還要正確理解圖表中的數(shù)據(jù)：該校學(xué)生在手機(jī)上所花的時間中有58%用來學(xué)習(xí)，有28%用來查資料，有12%用來娛樂。不能把圖表中的數(shù)據(jù)理解為58%的該校學(xué)生用手機(jī)學(xué)習(xí)，28%的學(xué)生用手機(jī)查資料，12%的學(xué)生用手機(jī)娛樂。

這篇圖表作文宜寫成三個段落。第一段先指出圖表所反映的內(nèi)容——中國某高校學(xué)生使用手機(jī)閱讀的情況，然后描述圖表中的數(shù)據(jù)。為了使描述條理清晰，我們不妨按照從大到小的順序依次描述，并盡量避免措詞單調(diào)。第二段分析這些數(shù)據(jù)背后的原因。首先分析為什么該校大學(xué)生在使用手機(jī)時把大部分（58%）的時間用于學(xué)習(xí)：隨著科技的發(fā)展，手機(jī)上出現(xiàn)了大量的應(yīng)用軟件，使學(xué)習(xí)變得更加輕松。接著分析為什么該校大學(xué)生花28%的時間用于查資料：現(xiàn)在手機(jī)的功能強(qiáng)大，大學(xué)生在做研究時能夠通過手機(jī)方便地獲取大量資料。最后，分析為什么該校大學(xué)生花12%的時間用于娛樂：在學(xué)習(xí)和研究之余，大學(xué)生需要通過一些娛樂換一換腦筋。第三段總結(jié)全文，先指出技術(shù)正在改變我們的學(xué)習(xí)方式，學(xué)生僅靠書本獲得知識的時代已經(jīng)過去，然后建議大學(xué)生在學(xué)習(xí)中要充分利用新技術(shù)。下面請看參考范文：

The pie chart above demonstrates how students of a Chinese university use their mobile phone for reading purposes. According to the chart， 58% of the students time with their mobile phone is devoted to studying， followed by searching for information （28%） and entertaining themselves （12%）.

Whats behind these figures？ With the advancement of technology， there have appeared a variety of learning applications in the app store， making learning much easier for university students， which explains why the lions share of their time is spent on their work. Besides， the students can have a wealth of information at their fingertips via the magic device when doing research. That is why they devote 28% of their time to looking for information. The students spend 12% of their time on entertainment because they need some fun to give their mind a rest.

Technology is transforming the way we learn. Gone are the days when students only get knowledge from books. It is therefore advised that college students take full advantage of new technology in their learning. （178 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. With the advancement of technology， there have appeared a variety of learning applications in the app store， making learning much easier for university students， which explains why the lions share of their time is spent on their work. 隨著技術(shù)的發(fā)展，手機(jī)應(yīng)用商店里出現(xiàn)了各種應(yīng)用軟件，讓大學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)變得更加輕松，這就是為什么他們把大部分手機(jī)閱讀時間用在學(xué)習(xí)上。the lions share of最大的一份。

2. Besides， the students can have a wealth of information at their fingertips via the magic device when doing research. 此外，學(xué)生在做研究時可以通過這款奇妙的設(shè)備輕松獲得大量信息。have sth at ones fingertips掌握。

3. Gone are the days when students only get knowledge from books. 學(xué)生僅通過書本獲取知識的時代已經(jīng)過去了。

4. It is therefore advised that college students take full advantage of new technology in their learning.因而建議大學(xué)生在學(xué)習(xí)中充分利用新技術(shù)。“It is advised that…”是一個提建議的常用句型。