短文改錯(cuò)分步練，高考多拿三五分

蔡映桃

筆者對(duì)部分低分學(xué)生，即在全區(qū)統(tǒng)考中短文改錯(cuò)的得分低于3分的考生，就短文改錯(cuò)做題情況進(jìn)行訪(fǎng)談，了解到這部分考生是語(yǔ)法基礎(chǔ)較差，看不出錯(cuò)誤。也有人反映，原來(lái)老師要求背誦“動(dòng)詞形，名詞數(shù)，還要注意形和副，連、介、代、冠常光顧，必須記牢固”，但當(dāng)他們做題時(shí)，要一下子同時(shí)注意八個(gè)方面，簡(jiǎn)直就是難如登天。

如果我們把任務(wù)拆分，每一次閱讀有選擇地注意一兩項(xiàng)語(yǔ)法考點(diǎn)，將問(wèn)題分批處理，分步進(jìn)行，不但有利于考生集中精神運(yùn)用一兩項(xiàng)相關(guān)語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，也易于發(fā)現(xiàn)該方面的錯(cuò)誤。

筆者選取本人任教的30名低分學(xué)生參與以下短文改錯(cuò)五步法的實(shí)驗(yàn)，要求學(xué)生在平時(shí)訓(xùn)練時(shí)每次只關(guān)注一兩個(gè)考點(diǎn)。以2018年全國(guó)I卷的短文改錯(cuò)為例，說(shuō)明具體做法：

第一步：通讀全文，關(guān)注動(dòng)詞與介詞。

用鉛筆劃出所有的動(dòng)詞，包括謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞和非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，以及與動(dòng)詞相連的介詞（如果有介詞的話(huà)，注意動(dòng)介搭配是否正確）。注意時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)、主謂一致以及非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞與所修飾的詞之間的關(guān)系是主動(dòng)、被動(dòng)，還是表目的。

During my last winter holiday， I went to countryside with my father to visit my grandparents. I find a big change there. The first time I went there， they were living in a small house with dogs， ducks， and another animals. Last winter when I went here again， they had a big separate house to raise dozens of chicken. They also had a small pond which they raised fish. My grandpa said last summer they earned quite a lot by sell the fish. I felt happily that their life had improved. At the end of our trip， I told my father that I planned to return for every two years， but he agreed.

容易發(fā)現(xiàn)以下兩處錯(cuò)誤：

（1）find與前后句的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞went時(shí)態(tài)不一致，將find改為found;

（2）介詞by后的sell是原形，應(yīng)改為selling。

第二步：通讀全文，關(guān)注名詞。

用鉛筆劃出所有的名詞，包括相連的介詞和相連的修飾語(yǔ)（不定代詞或冠詞）。注意名詞的單復(fù)數(shù);如果名詞后有介詞，注意名詞與介詞的搭配是否正確;如果名詞前有冠詞，注意其后的“（形容詞+）名詞”是否以元音發(fā)音開(kāi)頭，以及注意該名詞是特指還是泛指;如果名詞前有不定代詞或指示代詞，注意其單復(fù)數(shù)、性別及前后邏輯所指關(guān)系等。

During my last winter holiday ， I went to countryside with my father to visit my grandparents . I find a big change there. The first time I went there， they were living in a small house with dogs ， ducks ， and another animals . Last winter when I went here again， they had a big separate house to raise dozens of chicken . They also had a small pond which they raised fish . My grandpa said last summer they earned quite a lot by sell the fish . I felt happily that their life had improved. At the end of our trip ， I told my father that I planned to return for every two years ， but he agreed.

容易發(fā)現(xiàn)以下四處錯(cuò)誤：

（1）countryside前少冠詞，要加上the，這是習(xí)慣搭配;

（2）復(fù)數(shù)名詞animals前不可用another（另一個(gè)），根據(jù)語(yǔ)境和常識(shí)another應(yīng)改為other（別的）;

（3）chicken 因受dozens of修飾，應(yīng)改為復(fù)數(shù)chickens。

（4）因every two years這類(lèi)短語(yǔ)前通常不用介詞，故應(yīng)刪除for。

第三步：通讀全文，關(guān)注形容詞和副詞。

用鉛筆劃出所有的形容詞和副詞，注意形容詞可修飾名詞做定語(yǔ)，還可在句中做表語(yǔ)或補(bǔ)語(yǔ);副詞修飾動(dòng)詞、形容詞或全句做狀語(yǔ);還要注意是否需要用比較級(jí)或者最高級(jí)。

During my last winter holiday， I went to countryside with my father to visit my grandparents. I find a big change there. The first time I went there， they were living in a small house with dogs， ducks， and another animals. Last winter when I went here again， they had a big separate house to raise dozens of chicken. They also had a small pond which they raised fish. My grandpa said last summer they earned quite a lot by sell the fish. I felt happily that their life had improved. At the end of our trip， I told my father that I planned to return for every two years， but he agreed.

容易發(fā)現(xiàn)以下兩種處錯(cuò)：

（1）因作者去農(nóng)村看望爺爺是上個(gè)寒假了，也就是早就回來(lái)了，應(yīng)當(dāng)是“去那里”而非“去這里”，故將I went here again中的here改為there。

（2）因文中felt是系動(dòng)詞，其后應(yīng)接形容詞做表語(yǔ)，故將happily改為happy。

第四步：通讀全文，關(guān)注連詞。

用鉛筆劃出所有的連詞，包括連接單詞、短語(yǔ)或句子的連詞。注意定語(yǔ)從句中連詞所做的成分，注意翻譯前后句子并判斷前后句之間是順連還是轉(zhuǎn)折，注意該連詞的意思是否符合邏輯。

During my last winter holiday， I went to countryside with my father to visit my grandparents. I find a big change there. The first time I went there， they were living in a small house with dogs， ducks， and another animals. Last winter when I went here again， they had a big separate house to raise dozens of chicken. They also had a small pond which they raised fish. My grandpa said last summer they earned quite a lot by sell the fish. I felt happily that their life had improved. At the end of our trip， I told my father that I planned to return for every two years， but he agreed.

容易發(fā)現(xiàn)以下兩處錯(cuò)誤：

（1）因小池塘應(yīng)是養(yǎng)魚(yú)的地方，即they raised fish中缺地點(diǎn)狀語(yǔ)，故改which為where，引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句。當(dāng)然，也可在which前加介詞in，相當(dāng)于they raised fish in the pond。

（2）“我告訴父親我計(jì)劃每?jī)赡昊匾淮巍迸c“他同意了”是順承關(guān)系，而非轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，故改but為and。

第五步：默讀全文，關(guān)注邏輯。

通過(guò)語(yǔ)感和全文大意，看看是否還能找出一些邏輯不通順或不順眼的地方。2018年全國(guó)Ⅰ卷答案如下：

During my last winter holiday， I went to ∧countryside with my father to visit my grandparents. I find a big change there. The first time I went there， they were living in a small house with dogs， ducks， and another animals. Last winter when I went here again， they had a big separate house to raise dozens of chicken. They also had a small pond∧which they raised fish. My grandpa said last summer they earned quite a lot by sell the fish. I felt happily that their life had improved. At the end of our trip， I told my father that I planned to return for every two years， but he agreed.

當(dāng)然，所有的方法都需要經(jīng)過(guò)一定的訓(xùn)練時(shí)間和一定的量才顯成效。所以參加訓(xùn)練實(shí)驗(yàn)的考生每天一篇，僅經(jīng)過(guò)30天的訓(xùn)練之后，在11月的期中考試中，所有參加五步法訓(xùn)練的考生都提高了1～3分，他們自己也說(shuō)，五步法效果好。

當(dāng)學(xué)生在短文改錯(cuò)中實(shí)施有意注意（選擇性注意）訓(xùn)練一段時(shí)間，對(duì)五步法的操作自然進(jìn)入了熟練和系統(tǒng)化，之后，他們遇到短文改錯(cuò)的時(shí)候就會(huì)自動(dòng)轉(zhuǎn)換成有意注意，也就是說(shuō)，他們以后每次看到短文改錯(cuò)就自然而然地往各類(lèi)型考點(diǎn)方向去考慮，屆時(shí)就無(wú)需再分五步或者閱讀五次了。這種訓(xùn)練在一定程度上有助于鞏固學(xué)生的語(yǔ)法基礎(chǔ)，并有助于減少其書(shū)面表達(dá)的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，提高他們?cè)谟⒄Z(yǔ)寫(xiě)作上的糾錯(cuò)能力，繼而也會(huì)在一定程度上促進(jìn)他們的英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作。

注：該論文為廣州市教育科學(xué)“十二五”規(guī)劃2015年度立項(xiàng)課題（“背誦輸入前提下運(yùn)用paraphrase促進(jìn)高中生英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作的行動(dòng)研究”，編號(hào)：1201542919）的論文成果之一。

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