2020年12月大學(xué)英語四、六級作文試題評析（三）

賈從永

四? ? ? 級

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic “Changes in the Way of Education”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學(xué)英語四級作文題目要求考生論述教育方式的變化。說起教育方式的變化，最顯著的就是近年來網(wǎng)絡(luò)教育的興起。尤其是在新冠病毒暴發(fā)之后，網(wǎng)絡(luò)教育成為人們停課不停學(xué)的唯一選擇。

這篇作文可以寫三個段落。第一段提出所要討論的話題，先指出近年來教育方式發(fā)生了巨大變化，然后引用統(tǒng)計(jì)數(shù)據(jù)來支撐這一觀點(diǎn)。第二段分析教育方式發(fā)生巨大變化的原因。由于這是一篇論說文，所以分析原因就成為本文的重心所在。為了使分析透徹，我們不妨從兩方面展開。第一，科技進(jìn)步是教育方式變化的推動力量。然后我們通過今昔對比對這一點(diǎn)略作展開：過去人們要取得文憑或證書，就得到實(shí)體學(xué)校去報(bào)名和上課;但是隨著互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的興起，如今人們只需要一臺電腦和網(wǎng)絡(luò)連接，就可以隨時隨地接受教育。接著，我們指出教育方式變化的另一個推動因素是新冠病毒的暴發(fā)，因?yàn)樗铀倭诉@場教育革命。在新冠病毒暴發(fā)之后，世界各地的學(xué)校紛紛關(guān)閉，無數(shù)學(xué)生只好轉(zhuǎn)到線上上課。本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾。第三段先指出盡管網(wǎng)絡(luò)教育有種種好處，但它并非沒有挑戰(zhàn)。然后，指出結(jié)合了線上線下學(xué)習(xí)的混合式教育模式也許會更好地滿足人們對優(yōu)質(zhì)教育的需求。下面請看參考范文：

Recent years have seen dramatic changes in the way of education. According to a Shanghai University survey， close to three quarters （74.3%） of respondents reported having taken online courses in the past five years.

Advances in technology are the driving force behind the changes. In the past， if you wanted to get a diploma or a certificate， you had to sign up for courses at a brick-and-mortar institution and physically attend class. But with the rise of the Internet， education is available anytime and anywhere as long as you have a computer and an internet connection. Another contributing factor is the outbreak of Covid-19， which accelerated the revolution in education. With schools shut across the world in the wake of Covid-19， millions of students had to shift from the conventional learning model to low-contact online learning.

For all its benefits， e-learning is not without challenges. Perhaps a hybrid model of education， which combines the advantages of offline and online learning， will better meet people’s demand for a quality education. （169 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. Recent years have seen dramatic changes in the way of education.近年來教育方式發(fā)生了巨大變化。see見證，作此義時句子的主語一般是某地或某個（段）時間。

2. In the past， if you wanted to get a diploma or a certificate， you had to sign up for courses at a brick-and-mortar institution and physically attend class. 在過去，你如果想取得文憑或證書，就必須在實(shí)體學(xué)校報(bào)名參加課程，而且要到班里上課。sign up for 報(bào)名參加。brick-and-mortar 實(shí)體的。

3. With schools shut across the world in the wake of Covid-19， millions of students had to shift from the conventional learning model to low-contact online learning. 在新冠病毒暴發(fā)之后，由于全世界的學(xué)校關(guān)閉，無數(shù)學(xué)生不得不從傳統(tǒng)的學(xué)習(xí)模式轉(zhuǎn)到接觸少的線上學(xué)習(xí)?！癢ith schools shut…”是一個with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，表示原因。in the wake of sth 作為……的結(jié)果。

4. For all its benefits， e-learning is not without challenges. 盡管在線學(xué)習(xí)有種種好處，但它并非沒有挑戰(zhàn)。for all盡管，意思相當(dāng)于despite。

5. Perhaps a hybrid model of education， which combines the advantages of offline and online learning， will better meet people’s demand for a quality education.也許結(jié)合了線下線上學(xué)習(xí)的混合式教育模式會更好地滿足人們對優(yōu)質(zhì)教育的需求。

六? ? ? 級

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on why students should be encouraged to develop creativity. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

這道大學(xué)英語六級作文題目要求考生論述為什么學(xué)生應(yīng)當(dāng)被鼓勵提高創(chuàng)造能力。2016年12月的大學(xué)英語六級作文曾經(jīng)考過創(chuàng)造的重要性及鼓勵創(chuàng)造的措施，但是本題的范圍有所縮小。因此，我們寫這篇作文時不能泛泛地論述創(chuàng)造能力的重要性，而應(yīng)集中論述創(chuàng)造能力對學(xué)生的重要性，否則就是扣題不緊。

這篇作文可以寫三個段落。第一段提出本文所要論述的主題。我們不妨用常見的轉(zhuǎn)折法開頭。即開篇先從一般人對創(chuàng)造能力的看法談起，然后話鋒一轉(zhuǎn)，提出自己對創(chuàng)造能力的看法：創(chuàng)造能力是每一個學(xué)生需要具備的生存技能，這樣才能在學(xué)校里和職場上獲得成功。第二段論述為什么學(xué)生應(yīng)當(dāng)被鼓勵提高創(chuàng)造能力，原因不外乎創(chuàng)造能力對學(xué)生非常重要。為了使論述深入透徹，我們可以從兩個層面展開：在校園里和在職場上。我們首先指出學(xué)生需要具有創(chuàng)造能力才能在學(xué)校里獲得成功，然后引用石溪大學(xué)的一項(xiàng)研究來證實(shí)這一點(diǎn)。接著，我們可以指出創(chuàng)造能力會讓學(xué)生在將來的事業(yè)中受益。這是因?yàn)閷W(xué)生具備了創(chuàng)造能力，才能用最高效的方式解決工作場所中的問題，從而脫穎而出。因此可以毫不夸張地說，創(chuàng)造能力對今天的學(xué)生來說是最寶貴的一種能力。本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾：第三段先呼應(yīng)開頭，重述主題，指出創(chuàng)造能力并不是作家和音樂家的專利，而是學(xué)生在21世紀(jì)成功的必備技能。最后建議學(xué)校更加重視培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的創(chuàng)造能力。下面請看參考范文：

When we think of creativity， most of us will readily associate it with art， from composing music to writing fiction. But rarely is creativity so mysterious. In fact， it is a life skill every student needs to possess to be successful in school and in the workplace.

A student needs to be creative to achieve success on campus， as creativity is what makes his school life fun and work easier. A Stony Brook University study finds that creative students are more likely to score high in exams and be popular with their peers. What’s more， the ability to think creatively benefits a student in his future career. With creativity， he can solve workplace problems in the most efficient way， which helps him stand out. Hence， it’s no stretch to say that creativity is the single most valuable skill for students today.

Creativity is not the monopoly of writers and musicians. It’s a crucial skill for students to succeed in the 21st century. Therefore， schools and colleges should attach more importance to encouraging creativity in students. （175 words）

語言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. When we think of creativity， most of us will readily associate it with art， from composing music to writing fiction. 當(dāng)我們想到創(chuàng)造能力的時候，大部分人會馬上把它與藝術(shù)聯(lián)系到一起，從作曲到寫小說。

2. With creativity， he can solve workplace problems in the most efficient way， which helps him stand out. 有了創(chuàng)造能力，他就能夠用最高效的方法解決工作中的問題，這有助于他脫穎而出。stand out脫穎而出，引人注目。

3. Hence， it’s no stretch to say that creativity is the single most valuable skill for students today. 因此可以毫不夸張地說，創(chuàng)造能力對今天的學(xué)生來說是最有用的技能。it’s no stretch to say可以毫不夸張地說。single與形容詞最高級連用，起加強(qiáng)語氣的作用。

4. Therefore， schools and colleges should attach more importance to encouraging creativity in students. 因而，中小學(xué)和大學(xué)應(yīng)更加重視鼓勵學(xué)生的創(chuàng)造性。attach importance to重視。