寫作課教學(xué)設(shè)計

馮海霞

一、教學(xué)目標

學(xué)生學(xué)會用運用4條寫作技巧修改作文，提升作文質(zhì)量。

二、教學(xué)難點

運用連接詞增加文章的連貫性。

三、教學(xué)準備

PPT，閱讀材料，小組活動材料，評價表，備用練習(xí)。

四、教學(xué)過程

Step1 Starter Odd One Out

T： Look at the four words and decide Which one is different and why ？One minute.

（Show fantastic， excellent， worse， great on PPT）

S1：Worse is different， its比較級，others are not. （孩子不會說比較級）

S2：Fantastic is different because it doesnt have a letter e.

S3：Worse is different because the others are positive， worse is negetive.

……

（設(shè)計意圖：1.熱身，活躍思維，讓學(xué)生首先感知一下這些詞匯。

2. fantastic， excellent， great都是表示“好的”比較高級的詞匯，與本課的教學(xué)內(nèi)容相符。）

T： Fantastic！ Today well talk about how to make our writing more interesting.

Step 2 Guided discovery

1. Self-exploring

T：First， read these two descriptions.Which is more interesting？ Two minutes for reading.

1. Last year I went to Japan to see the World Cup Final. It was a very good experience.

We were very excited. We arrived at the stadium five hours early.

There were lots of people outside the stadium. A lot of the people were dancing and singing.

We went into the stadium and went to our seats.

2. Last year I went to Japan to see the World Cup Final. It was a fantastic experience！

We were really excited so we arrived at the huge， modern stadium five hours early.

There were thousands of happy people outside and a lot of them were dancing and singing loudly.We went inside and couldn't wait to get to our seats.

（Hand out the reading material）

（The Ss do the reading）

T： Which one do you think is more interesting？ Show me with your fingers.

（讓學(xué)生，用手勢告知答案，這樣很直觀，又可以幫助集中學(xué)生注意力。）

All the students agree the second one is more interesting.

T： Can you tell me why you think the second one is better？

S4： There are some good words， such as fantastic， huge and so on.

S5： The sentences are longer.

S6： Thousands of and couldnt wait to get to our seats are better.

（設(shè)計意圖：讓學(xué)生先自己思考，使他們產(chǎn)生學(xué)習(xí)的需求）

2. Guided exploring

（1）自學(xué)

T： Excellent. You have read the two paragraphs very carefully. Now Ill tell you what I think.

（Hand out the sheet of the writing tips）

T： Now Ill give you five minutes to learn the tips by yourselves.

（The Ss learn the tips by themselves， the teacher walks around the classroom and does the mornitoring， or notes down the difficulties they have.）

Writing tip （Making your writing more interesting）

1.Think about the language you want to use. Is there a more interesting or dramatic way of saying what you want to say？ How does the writer in text 2 say：It was a very good experience； lots of people； We went to our seats？

2. Add details to your writing. One way to do this is to use adjectives and adverbs. In text2， how does the writer describe： the stadium； the people； the dancing and singing？ Underline the adjectives and adverbs in text2.

3.Too many short sentences can sound boring. Link some of them together with words like so，because，while，but， etc. Circle the linking word in text2.

4. Try not to repeat the same words too often. How does the writer in text2 say：the people； We went into the stadium？

（2）互學(xué)

T： Check your answers in groups of four， three minutes.

（設(shè)計意圖：有些學(xué)生并不能完全看懂這些寫作技巧，本環(huán)節(jié)是為學(xué)生提供一個互相學(xué)習(xí)的機會。）

T： Do you need any help with the writing tips？

（在PPT上展示答案）

Last year I went to Japan to see the World Cup Final. It was a fantastic experience！ We were really excited so we arrived at the huge， modern stadium five hours early. There were thousands of happy people outside and a lot of them were dancing and singing loudly. We went inside and couldn't wait to get to our seats.

Ss： No.

3.Upgrading

T： （進一步追問）Now look at Tip1， why do we say couldn't wait to get to our seats is more dramatic than went to our seats.

S7： Its a good expression.

S8： It means 迫不及待的做某事，we can see how they feel.

T： Excellent， I quite agree. This phrase tells us not only the fact but also their feeling.

T：Now Tip2， can you think of more words to describe the experience or the singing and dancing

S9： An unforgetable experience.

S10：An exciting experience.

S11： A lot of them were dancing and singing happily .

T： Its OK. But there is a happy here.（Point to happy people）

S11：Well， then we can change happy into exciting.

T：Wow， what a good idea！

（設(shè)計意圖：通過追問加深學(xué)生思維的深度。）

T：OK， boys and girls， can you use the idea of Tip2 to make this sentence more interesting. Work in pairs. One minute.

（Show the sentence A cat is sleeping on PPT. ）

T：Lets see how everything is going. S12， your sentence？

S12： A black cat is sleeping comfortably in the sun.

S13：A yellow and white cat with no tail is sleeping quietly in the box.

… …

（The longest sentence is A little white cat is sleeping soundly on the big， red leather sofa， while her mother is looking for her everywhere.）

（活動設(shè)計意圖：在活動中運用Tip2的學(xué)作技巧。）

T：Well done， everybody！ Lets move on to Tip3. Can you think of some linking words without looking at your reading material.（Brain Storm）

S14： And， but， then， so， because， while.

T： Good job！ Any other words？

S15： Although， however.

S16：Or， when.

T： OK， Lets play a game with linking words.（Hand out two piles of paper， put them on the desk.） Play the game in groups of four. Choose one sentence from these sentences， then choose a linking word from these linking words . Then continue the sentence with the linking word. Lets see. My sentence is He married Susan.The linking word is because，so my sentence is He married Susan because he loves her very much. Do you know how to play the game now？

All the Ss： Yes.

T： Then three minutes in groups of four.

（The students play the game， and the teacher does the monitoring .）

（小組活動的操作方法：準備六個句子及四個連詞分別打印到紙條上，分兩組扣放到桌面上，學(xué)生們從句子和連詞中分別抽一個紙條，進行續(xù)寫句子的活動。全組成員同時抽，根據(jù)抽到的句子和連詞，在紙條上續(xù)寫句子，再輪流說。因為抽到什么句子，什么連詞都是變數(shù)，所以通常學(xué)生都很喜歡這個游戲。）

1. The beef is delicious …

2. The teacher is nice…

3. Simon is ill…

4. Im learning English…

5. She bought a new bike…

6. I cant come out this Sunday…

連詞 and， but， so， because.

（設(shè)計意圖：在活動中運用Tip3的寫作技巧。）

Step 3 Extentions

T： Did you have fun playing the game？

Ss： Yes.

T： Im glad to hear that. Next Id like to make sure youve understand all the tips.

T： There is a passage， but its not very interesting. Please， rewrite it to make it more interesting. Use the ideas in the writing tip. Five minutes for you.

It was 10 pm and I was late for the party. I got in my car. I drove to the party.

A dog ran into the road.I saw the dog. I tried to stop. I lost control of the car.

I hit a tree.

（The Ss rewrite the passage all by themselves. The teacher does the mornitoring and helps the students if necessary.）

（Assessing）

T：Please check and improve your passage according to the checklist.Two minutes.

T： Now pass your passage to the student behind you， the last student bring yours to the the first one. Check you parteners passage according to the checklist. Another two minutes.

T： Read the passage again and underline at least one good sentence. One minute.

T： Get back your own passage and share your own good sentence or the good sentence you get from other students in your group.Three minutes.

（The teacher does the monitoring and notes down the difficulities the Ss have，or the good sentences they have got.）

（設(shè)計意圖：通過學(xué)生的自評，首先幫助他們回顧本節(jié)課的寫作方法，提醒他們有意識的運用到自己的寫作中?；ピu和分享活動為他們提供了互相學(xué)習(xí)，共同提高的機會。）

學(xué)生作品

It was 10pm and I was worried because I was late for the party. I got in my car and drove as fast as I could to the party. Suddenly， I saw a dog run into the road. I ytried to stop， but I lost control of the car and hit a tree. Luckily， I was not badly hurt.

Homework

1. Rewrite your composition neatly and beautifully， put it up on the back blackboard.

2. Find a passage you think is good.Share it with other students. And tell us why you think its good， according to the writing tips.

（設(shè)計意圖：作業(yè)1讓學(xué)生根據(jù)課上收集到的信息，進一步修改文章，貼到后黑板的展示欄讓大家分享。）

五、教學(xué)反思

第一，寫作一直是讓師生很頭疼的一個話題，往往是很費時費力最終還效果不佳。在教學(xué)中，教師可以為學(xué)生提供一些寫作的技巧，比如：如何審題？如何分段等等？本課給學(xué)生提供的是修改作文的技巧，當(dāng)然學(xué)生還是要平時加強知識積累，并在寫作中有意識地運用這些技巧，學(xué)習(xí)才有實效。

第二，筆者的設(shè)計理念是，以學(xué)生為中心，以活動為載體，以提高能力為目標，讓學(xué)生自己探索、體驗知識獲得的過程。教師設(shè)計的活動有一定的梯度，本課的活動是從詞到句再到篇?；顒拥男问揭孕〗M合作學(xué)習(xí)為主。教師的主要作用是，設(shè)計任務(wù)，制定規(guī)則，設(shè)定時限，提供幫助，記錄問題，啟迪思維，給予評價。

第三，運用了過程性評價，制定了學(xué)生自評和互評的標準，采用了自評、互評和他評的評價方式。

第四，注意了教師指令性語言的簡單、清晰、明確。

第五，注意運用了追問來加深學(xué)生思維的深度。

以上都是筆者根據(jù)自己對新課標的理解，在設(shè)計授課過程中進行的一些思索和嘗試，希望得到各位專家的批評指正，衷心的表示感謝！

六、備用練習(xí)

Rewrite the sentences to make them more interesting. Use the ideas in the tips.

1.She walked into the room and sat down in the chair.（tip 2）

2.My alarm clock didn't ring. I was late for work.（tip 3）

3.The meal was great.（tip1）

4.My favourite restaurant is an Italian restaurant. The restaurant is the best restaurant in town.（tip4）