作文大比拼

原文：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look1 my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I very like it2. This3 shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its threeteen4 dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red hat5.

分析：

本篇介紹了自己衣柜里的服飾。敘述簡(jiǎn)潔、有條理，值得學(xué)習(xí)，但其中也有幾處需要注意：

1. Look 是不及物動(dòng)詞，所謂不及物動(dòng)詞也就是不能直接跟賓語(yǔ)。如果要跟賓語(yǔ)，應(yīng)在其后加上介詞at。

2. “我非常喜歡它”正確的語(yǔ)序?yàn)镮 like it very much。

3.shoes 為復(fù)數(shù)，所以不能用this, 表示這雙鞋應(yīng)說(shuō)成this pair of shoes。

4. 數(shù)字13 的表達(dá)需要特殊記憶，thirteen。

5. “它是一個(gè)紅色的帽子。”冠詞a用來(lái)修飾名詞hat。為了避免重復(fù)，在此應(yīng)用one 代替hat。

改正：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look at my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I like it very much. This pair of shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its thirteen dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red one.