2021年12月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四、六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析（二）

賈從永

四級(jí)

Directions： Suppose you have just participated in a school project of collecting used books on campus. You are now to write a report about the project， which may include its aim， organizers， participants and activities. You will have 30 minutes to write the report. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文題目假設(shè)考生剛參加了一個(gè)收集二手書的校園項(xiàng)目，要求考生寫一份報(bào)告，內(nèi)容包括該項(xiàng)目的目的、組織者、參加者和活動(dòng)。

這份報(bào)告本質(zhì)上是一篇說明文，考生只需把這個(gè)項(xiàng)目介紹清楚即可，無需分析論證。

本文可以寫三個(gè)段落。

第一段介紹項(xiàng)目目的——幫助農(nóng)村小學(xué)的兒童。

第二段介紹項(xiàng)目組織者、參加者和活動(dòng)內(nèi)容。新學(xué)期伊始，學(xué)生會(huì)就開展了一系列宣傳活動(dòng)，例如在校園各處張貼海報(bào)和發(fā)放傳單，以爭(zhēng)取支持，這些海報(bào)和傳單詳細(xì)說明了所要收集的圖書種類以及收集圖書的方式。學(xué)生們熱情參加，老師們也鼎力相助?？偣彩占搅?000多冊(cè)圖書，大部分嶄新如初或八成新，可以分為兩種類型——文學(xué)書和科普書。這些書與學(xué)校購(gòu)買的1000冊(cè)新書一起寄給了貴州省的一所山區(qū)小學(xué)，幫助該校創(chuàng)辦一個(gè)圖書室。

第三段指出，受到成功的鼓舞，學(xué)生會(huì)正在考慮開展更多的收集二手圖書的項(xiàng)目，以幫助欠發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)的兒童。

下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

Our school launched a project of collecting used books on campus to help the children of a rural primary school recently.

At the beginning of this semester， the Students Union of our school started a series of publicity activities， such as putting up posters around the campus and handing out leaflets， to drum up support. The posters and leaflets specified the kind of books that were wanted and the way the books were collected. The students were very enthusiastic about the project. Teachers also contributed heavily to the project. More than 2，000 books were collected in all， most of them brand new or gently used. The books can be divided into two categories： literature and popular science. All the books， together with 1，000 new books purchased by our university， were sent to a primary school in a remote mountainous region in Guizhou Province to help it set up a reading room.

Encouraged by the success， the Students Union is now considering more projects to collect used books for children in less developed areas of China. （175 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. At the beginning of this semester， the Students Union of our school started a series of publicity activities， such as putting up posters around the campus and handing out leaflets， to drum up support. 本學(xué)期開始，我校學(xué)生會(huì)就開始了一系列宣傳活動(dòng)，比如在校園各處張貼海報(bào)和分發(fā)傳單，以爭(zhēng)取支持。drum up 竭力爭(zhēng)取。

2. More than 2，000 books were collected in all， most of them brand new or gently used. 總共收集了2000多冊(cè)書，大部分書是嶄新的或八成新。

3. All the books， together with 1，000 new books purchased by our university， were sent to a primary school in a remote mountainous region in Guizhou Province to help it set up a reading room. 所有收集的書和我們大學(xué)購(gòu)買的1000冊(cè)新書一起寄給了貴州省偏遠(yuǎn)山區(qū)的一所小學(xué)，以幫助該校建一個(gè)圖書室。together with 和……一起。

六級(jí)

Directions： Comment on the phenomenon and suggest measures to address the issue. Nowadays star chasing is prevalent among many teenagers. They take pop stars as their idols， imitating their way of talking， following their style of dressing， and seeking every chance to meet them in person at great expenses.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)六級(jí)作文試題要求考生評(píng)論青少年追星現(xiàn)象。這種作文試題屬于分析現(xiàn)象型，其特點(diǎn)是提出一個(gè)社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，要求考生分析這一現(xiàn)象并提出應(yīng)對(duì)措施。

本文可以寫三段。

第一段提出所要討論的社會(huì)現(xiàn)象。提出現(xiàn)象的方法有多種，有一種行之有效的方法叫故事法，即在文章開頭講一個(gè)可喜、可愕、可悲或可嘆的小故事，讓讀者在不知不覺中被吸引到文章里。我們可以在本文開頭段講一個(gè)悲慘的故事——去年一個(gè)上海女孩在所崇拜的偶像訂婚后自殺身亡，以此引出青少年追星的社會(huì)現(xiàn)象。

第二段對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象展開分析。我們不妨從分析青少年追星的原因下筆。分析原因沒有標(biāo)準(zhǔn)答案，考生可以根據(jù)自己的知識(shí)儲(chǔ)備自由發(fā)揮。為了使分析深入透徹，最好從兩三個(gè)方面展開。就本文而言，我們不妨從以下兩個(gè)方面分析青少年追星的原因：第一，心理原因；第二，媒體影響。這兩個(gè)方面都要略作展開。比如，在分析心理原因時(shí)，可以援引一些權(quán)威機(jī)構(gòu)的研究來增強(qiáng)說服力；在分析媒體影響時(shí)，可以列舉黃金時(shí)段播出的名人訪談節(jié)目及大量專門談?wù)撁餍堑纳缃幻襟w。需要注意的是，分析追星的原因時(shí)不能泛泛而論，必須緊緊扣住青少年，否則就是扣題不緊。

本文的結(jié)尾段可以先指出在大多數(shù)情況下青少年追星并沒什么大不了，只有過了頭才會(huì)成為問題；然后建議家長(zhǎng)和教育者在處理青少年追星時(shí)要正確地看待這一問題。

下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

Selena Zhang， a 19-year-old Shanghai girl， committed suicide last year after her favourite star got engaged， leaving her loved ones heartbroken. Though such extreme examples are rare， a recent survey shows that a whopping 76.2 percent of teenagers in China admit being star chasers.

Psychologists believe that people have a subconscious desire to idolize someone who is better， greater or richer. That is why teenagers， especially girls， worship stars they see as good-looking or talented. A Johns Hopkins University study shows that teens find companionship and confidence by participating in activities related to their idols. The media have also made their contribution. Apart from TV talk shows running in prime time that are exclusively about celebrities， there are now numerous social media devoted to blogging about stars. Bombarded with details of celebrities lives， it is only natural for the young to be obsessed with stars.

In most cases， caring about celebs is no big deal. It is only when it goes overboard that celebrity worship becomes a problem. So parents and educators should put the issue in perspective when dealing with teenagers chasing stars. （184 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. Selena Zhang， a 19-year-old Shanghai girl， committed suicide last year after her favourite star got engaged， leaving her loved ones heartbroken. 去年，19歲的上海女孩賽琳娜·張?jiān)谒矚g的明星訂婚后自殺身亡，這讓她的親人悲痛欲絕。leaving her loved ones heartbroken 是現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，表示結(jié)果。

2. The media have also made their contribution. 媒體也起了作用。

3. In most cases， caring about celebs is no big deal. 在大多數(shù)情況下，關(guān)注名人并沒有什么大不了。celeb = celebrity名人。no big deal 沒什么大不了。

4. It is only when it goes overboard that celebrity worship becomes a problem. 只有當(dāng)崇拜名人過了頭才會(huì)成為問題。go overboard 做得過分（或過火）。

5. So parents and educators should put the issue in perspective when dealing with teenagers chasing stars. 所以，家長(zhǎng)和教育者在處理青少年追星時(shí)應(yīng)當(dāng)正確地認(rèn)識(shí)這個(gè)問題。put…in perspective 正確地看待（或判斷）。