愛要付諸行動

彭明芳

愛與被愛是人生最大的幸福，在“我”的成長過程中，父親教會了“我”——愛要付諸行動。“我”和妻子決定把這個座右銘傳遞給自己的孩子，“我們”的孩子做到了嗎？“我們”是如何踐行的呢？

To?love?and?to?be?loved?is?the?greatest?happiness?of?existence.?When?I?was?a?child，?my?parents?always?told?me?a?motto，?which?is?“Love?is?action.”?The?motto?influences?me?during?my?whole?life.?Now?as?parents，?I?want?to?pass?it?down?to?my?children.?Our?chil?dren?had?watched?both?my?wife?and?me?do?and?say?“Love?is?action.”?for?years，?we?hoped?that?they?could?gradually?understand?it.

One?Sunday?morning，?we?took?our?10?year?old?daughter，?Susan?and?6?year?old?son，?Robbie?to?the?shopping?center.?As?we?got?there，?we?saw?a?big?sign?that?said，?“Petting?Zoo?at?the?corner”.?The?kids?jumped?up?happily?and?asked，?“Daddy，?Mom，?can?we?go?there？”?Both?my?wife?and?I?were?just?out?of?work.?However，?we?thought?it?didn?t?take?so?much?money.?In?order?to?meet?their?desire，?we?said，?“Of?course.”?Then?I?gave?them?a?quarter（25美分）?each，?leaving?only?fifty?cents?in?my?pocket.?They?went?away?hand?in?hand?excitedly.?Immediately，?we?told?them?that?we?would?go?to?meet?them?at?the?gate?of?the?petting?zoo?after?shopping.

Actually，?petting?zoos?are?one?of?the?most?popular?places?for?children.?A?petting?zoo?is?made?up?of?hundreds?of?little?baby?animals?of?all?kinds.?Kids?pay?their?money?and?stay?in?the?enclosure?pleased?with?the?little?animals?while?their?parents?are?shopping.

Unexpectedly，?a?few?minutes?later，?as?we?were?shopping，?we?saw?Susan?walking?along?behind?us.?We?were?so?surprised?and?asked?her?what?had?happened.?She?responded?with?a?little?disappointment，?“Well，?a?ticket?to?Petting?Zoo?costs?fifty?cents.?So?I?decide?to?give?Robbie?my?quarter，?or?both?of?us?won?t?be?allowed?to?go?there.”?And?she?murmured?the?family?motto?“Love?is?action.”

Useful?sentence?patterns

1.?Then?I?gave?them?a?quarter?each，?leaving?only?fifty?cents?in?my?pocket.

【點石成金】leaving?only?fifty?cents?left?in?my?pocket是結果狀語，?意為“留下了50美分在口袋里”。整個句子意為“我給了他們每人25美分，留下了50美分在口袋里”。

2.?We?were?so?surprised?and?asked?her?what?had?happened.

【點石成金】what?had?happened是賓語從句，意為“發(fā)生了什么”。

閱讀上面的文章，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

注意：

1.?所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右;

2.?續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

My?wife?and?I?looked?at?each?other?and?smiled.

Susan?stood?with?her?hands?and?chin（下巴）?resting?on?the?fence?and?just?watched?Robbie?playing.

寫作導引

一、語篇研讀

二、情節(jié)構思

基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，采用圍繞中心提問相關問題的方法，構思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)，這個過程一般分為四步。

第一步，根據已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。

文章給出的部分主要記敘的是“我和妻子想要傳遞父母給我們的觀念——愛要付諸行動。一次去撫愛式動物園，在錢不夠的情況下，女兒選擇了讓弟弟去玩”。結合文章第一段，在“我”小的時候，“我”的父母告訴“我”，愛要付諸行動，我們可推斷出本文的立意是“愛”。

第二步，根據續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段應該寫什么內容。

分析第二段的段首句，我們可以推斷出續(xù)寫第一段的最后肯定要提到他們一起去了撫愛式動物園。

第三步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進行提問構思：

（1）How?did?Susan?s?parents?react?to?Susan?s?behaviour？

（2）Why?did?Susan?choose?to?give?her?money?to?Robbie？

（3）Where?would?Susan?and?her?parents?go?and?why？

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進行提問構思：

（1）What?did?Robbie?say?to?Susan？

（2）What?did?Susan?s?parents?do?for?Susan？

（3）What?did?Susan?and?Robbie?learn?from?the?experience？