2020年9月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四、六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析（三）

賈從永

四級(jí)

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the use of PowerPoint （PPT） in class. You can start your essay with the sentence “The use of PowerPoint （PPT） is becoming increasingly popular in class”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道四級(jí)作文試題要求學(xué)生分析校園里的一個(gè)普遍現(xiàn)象——用PPT上課越來(lái)越流行。這個(gè)話(huà)題貼近大學(xué)生的校園生活，考生們對(duì)教師使用PPT上課都有切身體驗(yàn)，可以說(shuō)最有發(fā)言權(quán)。

本文可以寫(xiě)成三個(gè)段落。第一段開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山地提出所要分析的現(xiàn)象——用PPT上課越來(lái)越流行。接著我們可以通過(guò)描述一個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)使這一現(xiàn)象具體可感：不論是在小學(xué)還是在大學(xué)，你很少見(jiàn)到教師不帶這種奇妙工具進(jìn)入課堂。第二段對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象展開(kāi)分析。我們既可以一邊倒地分析用PPT上課的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，也可以一邊倒地分析用PPT上課的缺點(diǎn)。但我們認(rèn)為從正反兩個(gè)方面分析更為公允，因?yàn)槭褂肞PT上課確實(shí)有利有弊。為了使論證充分，正反兩個(gè)方面都要略作展開(kāi)。比如，在分析用PPT上課的優(yōu)點(diǎn)時(shí)我們可以指出，對(duì)老師而言，如果使用得當(dāng)，PPT所呈現(xiàn)的信息重點(diǎn)突出，條理清晰;對(duì)學(xué)生而言，PPT可以幫助他們抓住重點(diǎn)，跟上老師的思路。在分析用PPT上課缺點(diǎn)時(shí)，我們可以指出經(jīng)?？吹嚼蠋熒险n只給學(xué)生念PowerPoint，而學(xué)生無(wú)聊地坐在那兒，納悶既然所有的信息在書(shū)上都有，為什么還要來(lái)上課。

第三段總結(jié)全文，提出建議。我們可以先指出PPT只是一種工具，可能用得有效，也可能用得糟糕，然后建議教師在做PPT幻燈片時(shí)要理解學(xué)生的信息需求，并在課堂上有選擇地和適當(dāng)?shù)丶右允褂谩?/p>

The use of PowerPoint （PPT） is becoming increasingly popular in class. You can rarely see a teacher going into a classroom without being armed with this magic tool， whether in a primary school or in a university.

Admittedly， PowerPoint presentation is a great tool for both faculty and students. One of the benefits for faculty is that， if properly utilized， it highlights the main points and maintains a well-planned flow of information. It also helps students identify the key points and follow their teachers train of thought. But the drawbacks are equally obvious if it is used excessively. It is not uncommon to see a teacher simply read PowerPoint to his students， who sit there bored， wondering why they bother to turn up when all the information is in their textbook.

PowerPoint is only a tool， and like any tool， it can be used effectively or poorly. It is advised that teachers understand the information need of their students when making PPT slides and use them selectively and appropriately in class. （173 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. You can rarely see a teacher going into a classroom without being armed with this magic tool， whether in a primary school or in a university.不論是在小學(xué)還是在大學(xué)，你很少見(jiàn)到老師不帶這種奇妙工具就進(jìn)入教室。

2. Admittedly， PowerPoint presentation is a great tool for both faculty and students. 誠(chéng)然，PowerPoint演示對(duì)教師和學(xué)生都是一個(gè)極好的工具。admittedly誠(chéng)然，用在句首表示讓步，后面常有but、however與之呼應(yīng)。

3. It is not uncommon to see a teacher simply read PowerPoint to his students， who sit there bored， wondering why they bother to turn up when all the information is in their textbook.經(jīng)?？吹嚼蠋熤唤o學(xué)生念PowerPoint，而學(xué)生無(wú)聊地坐在那兒，納悶既然所有的信息都在課本上，為什么還要來(lái)上課。

4. It is advised that teachers understand the information need of their students when making PPT slides and use them selectively and appropriately in class.建議教師在做PPT幻燈片時(shí)要理解學(xué)生的信息需求，并在課堂上有選擇地和適當(dāng)?shù)厥褂?。“it is advised that...”是提建議的一個(gè)常用句型。

六級(jí)

Directions：

For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the saying “Wealth of the mind is the only true wealth.” You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

本題要求考生論證一句諺語(yǔ)——精神財(cái)富是唯一的真正財(cái)富。這句諺語(yǔ)的意思是精神財(cái)富對(duì)我們最為重要。要寫(xiě)好這篇作文，我們首先要明確一個(gè)問(wèn)題：什么是精神財(cái)富？精神財(cái)富是相對(duì)于物質(zhì)財(cái)富而言，主要是指一個(gè)人的學(xué)識(shí)、信仰、意志、道德修養(yǎng)等內(nèi)在力量。

本文宜寫(xiě)三個(gè)段落。第一段開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，引出所要論證的諺語(yǔ)，并指出其寓意。第二段闡述為什么精神財(cái)富是唯一真正的財(cái)富，即論證精神財(cái)富的重要意義。精神財(cái)富對(duì)我們的意義是多方面的，限于篇幅，可以只舉出其一端：精神財(cái)富可以幫助我們克服障礙，實(shí)現(xiàn)人生目標(biāo)。我們不妨以美國(guó)盲人作家海倫·凱勒為例來(lái)證明這一點(diǎn)。海倫·凱勒身殘志堅(jiān)，克服了重重困難而成為美國(guó)著名作家和社會(huì)活動(dòng)家，其成就鼓舞了無(wú)數(shù)人。她獲得如此不凡的成就靠的是強(qiáng)大的精神財(cái)富，一個(gè)精神上貧窮的人是不可能取得這樣的成就的。第三段先指出，雖然物質(zhì)財(cái)富對(duì)于體面的生活必不可少，但只有精神財(cái)富才能給我們帶來(lái)深深的成就感，讓人生變得有意義，最后號(hào)召讀者重視精神財(cái)富的積累。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

An old saying has it that wealth of the mind is the only true wealth. It means that though material wealth is admirable， it is spiritual wealth that is most valuable for us.

A person with high integrity， profound knowledge， a firm conviction and a strong will can be described as spiritually wealthy. A growing body of evidence indicates that wealth of the mind helps us overcome obstacles and fulfill our life goal. Helen Keller， the American author and social activist， is a good example. By dint of an indomitable spirit， she overcame her handicaps to become the first deafblind American to earn a Bachelor of Arts degree. One of the most widely-admired writers of her time， she inspired millions of people with disabilities all over the world. Obviously， a spiritually poor person could not have obtained such an achievement.

Material wealth is absolutely necessary for a decent life， but only spiritual wealth will give us a deep sense of fulfillment that makes life worthwhile. Therefore， let us give more importance to the accumulation of wealth of the mind. （179 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. An old saying has it that wealth of the mind is the only true wealth.有一句老話(huà)說(shuō)，精神財(cái)富是唯一的真正財(cái)富。

2. A person with high integrity， profound knowledge， a firm conviction and a strong will can be described as spiritually wealthy. 一個(gè)具有正直操守、淵博知識(shí)、堅(jiān)定信仰和堅(jiān)強(qiáng)意志的人可以被稱(chēng)為精神上富有。

3. A growing body of evidence indicates that wealth of the mind helps us overcome obstacles and fulfill our life goal. 越來(lái)越多的證據(jù)表明，精神財(cái)富幫助我們克服障礙并實(shí)現(xiàn)我們的人生目標(biāo)。

4. One of the most widely-admired writers of her time， she inspired millions of people with disabilities all over the world.作為她那個(gè)時(shí)代最廣受贊譽(yù)的一位作家，她鼓舞了全世界數(shù)以百萬(wàn)計(jì)的殘疾人。

5. Obviously， a spiritually poor person could not have obtained such an achievement.顯然，一個(gè)精神上貧窮的人不可能取得這樣的成就。