廣東 張 燕
湖邊有兩位被困的美麗公主,傳說會有一位勇敢的王子來救她們,小公主每天耐心地等待,而大公主則決定自救……
Once upon a time there were two beautiful princesses whom had been kidnapped (劫持) by a hostile (敵對的) king. The king arranged to have them taken to a forgotten lake where they were abandoned on a small island. Here they were to remain forever, guarded by a terrifying lake monster.
Only when the wicked king and his court of wizards and fortune-tellers had been overthrown(推翻) did it become known that a brave prince was destined to rescue the princesses.
When the wind carried this news to the island, it filled the princesses' lives with hope. The younger princess, who was much sweeter and more beautiful than her sister, patiently waited for her love, making small decorations from flowers and clay, and singing songs. The older princess, however,didn't enjoy having to wait.
“I'll have to do something to help the prince rescue me. I'll let him know where I am, or what the lake monster's like.”
Determined to help the prince, she set to work, making signal fires, building towers, digging tunnels and a thousand other things. However, the terrible lake monster always did his best to cause her plans to fail.
Every morning she would prepare a different escape plan, but the monster would always manage to ruin it. The escape attempts went on day after day, and always ended with the monster capturing(捕捉) her. A game of cat and mouse between the princess and her guard began. Each escape attempt was more original and ingenious (機(jī)靈的) than its predecessor (前任), and each form of discovery was ever more subtle(機(jī)巧的) and surprising. They put so much effort and imagination into their plans that at the end of each day the princess and the monster would spend hours chatting like friends,about how they had each prepared their strategy. And when the moon came out they would say farewell, until tomorrow, and the monster would dive back down to the watery depths.
Ⅰ. Difficult sentences
1. Here they were to remain forever, guarded by a terrifying lake monster.
譯文:她們將永遠(yuǎn)留在這里,由一個可怕的湖怪看守。
分析:本句中were to do表示“將要做”的意思。 guarded by a terrifying lake monster為過去分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語。
2. They put so much effort and imagination into their plans that at the end of each day the princess and the monster would spend hours chatting like friends, about how they had each prepared their strategy.
譯文:他們在計劃中投入了如此多的精力和想象力,以至于每天結(jié)束時公主和怪物都會像朋友一樣聊上幾個小時,談?wù)撍麄內(nèi)绾螠?zhǔn)備各自的策略。
分析:本句的so...that...意為“如此……以至于……”。
Ⅱ. Sentence for writing
Only when the wicked king and his court of wizards and fortune-tellers had been overthrown did it become known that a brave prince was destined to rescue the princesses.
分析:“Only when...did it...”是一個倒裝的表達(dá),強(qiáng)調(diào)了條件狀語。
仿寫:只有抓住今天,才不會丟失明天。
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閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意:
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。
Paragraph 1:One day, the monster bid farewell to the princess like this:
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Paragraph 2:
However, the monster answered sadly, “I can't leave the island with you.”
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寫作導(dǎo)引
一、語篇研讀
要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密,我們必須充分了解所給材料大意。 本文是一篇記敘文,文章分析如下:
二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思
我們可以基于標(biāo)題、原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息,構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)。 這一構(gòu)思分為四步。
第一步,根據(jù)已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。
通讀全文可知,本文主要圍繞兩位被困的公主和看守公主的怪物展開。 小公主安于現(xiàn)狀,一心等待別人來施救,而大公主靠自己去爭取出逃的機(jī)會。 從文中的描述和續(xù)寫兩段所給出的提示我們可以看出,文章傾向于贊揚大公主的積極主動性。
第二步, 圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句 “One day, the monster bid farewell to the princess like this:”進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)What would the monster say?
(2)How would the monster react?
(3)How would the princess react?
第三步,根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段一定要寫什么。
分析一下續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句“However, the monster answered sadly,‘I can't leave the island with you.'”可以推斷在續(xù)寫第一段中,怪獸讓公主離開,并解釋原因,這樣才能夠解釋他為什么違背自己的職責(zé)放公主離開。 公主邀請怪獸一起離開,但是怪獸很悲傷,如此安排,確保兩段之間銜接合理,情節(jié)連貫。
第四步,根據(jù)“However, the monster answered sadly, ‘I can't leave the island with you.'”段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)Why would the princess invite the monster to leave together?
(2)Why couldn't the monster leave the island?
(3)How would the princess react?
(4)What would be the ending?
三、潤色成篇
在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意“續(xù)”的原則,做到主題、情節(jié)、語言風(fēng)格一致。 具體如下:
(1)通過分析,本文的主題是弘揚積極正面的價值觀,如積極主動,續(xù)寫時應(yīng)注意結(jié)局的設(shè)計;
(2)續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)和前面的開始和發(fā)展吻合,根據(jù)人物的性格特點進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測;
(3)前文有多處心理描寫和動作描寫,且用了大量的非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)、一些倒裝句和賓語從句,續(xù)寫的時候應(yīng)關(guān)注并模仿這些語言風(fēng)格;
(4)續(xù)寫時注意句型長短相間,句型豐富,語法、用詞、標(biāo)點符號的準(zhǔn)確性。