Dad??s pickle jar 爸爸的泡菜壇子

胡君祥

作者小時(shí)候時(shí)常目睹父親把硬幣投進(jìn)泡菜壇子，為他將來上大學(xué)攢錢，等到作者大學(xué)畢業(yè)，有了工作，也成了家后回到父母家里時(shí)，卻沒看見父親的泡菜壇子，作者不免思緒萬千。作者會再次看到父親的泡菜壇子嗎？

The pickle jar as far back as I can remem?ber sat on the floor in my parents bedroom.

When he got ready for bed， Dad would empty his pockets and throw his coins into the jar.

As a small boy I was always fascinated by the soun

ds the coins made as they were dropped into the jar. They landed with a merry jingle when the jar was almost empty. Then， the fuller the jar， the duller the sound.

Taking the coins to the bank was always a big job. Each time we drove to the bank， Dad would look at me hopefully， saying， “Those coins are going to keep you out of the small town.”

Also， each time he slid the box of rolled coins across the counter at the bank toward the cashier， he would shout proudly， “These are for my sons college fund. Hell never work at the mill（工廠） all his life like me.”

When we got home， we would start filling the jar again. He always let me drop the first coins into the empty jar. We smiled at each other as they made a brief， happy jingle. “Youll get to college on pennies，” he said.

No matter how rough things got at home， Dad continued to drop his coins into the jar. Even the summer when Dad got laid off from the mill， not a single coin was taken from the jar.

The years passed， and I finished college and took a job in another town. Once， while visiting my parents， I used the phone in their bedroom， and noticed that the pickle jar was gone. It had served its purpose and had been removed. A lump rose in my throat as I stared at the spot beside the dresser where the jar had always stood. My dad was a man of few words， and never lectured me on the values of determination， perseverance（堅(jiān)持不懈）， and faith. The pickle jar had taught me all these virtues.

Languag?Study

Ⅰ.? Difficult phrase in sentence

Even the summer when Dad got laid off from the mill， not a single coin was taken from the jar.

語境：即使在夏天爸爸被工廠解雇的時(shí)候，爸爸也沒花罐子里的一分錢。

分析：本句中，get laid off意為“被解雇”。

Ⅱ. Useful sentence patterns

1. Then， the fuller the jar， the duller the sound.

語境：然后，罐子越滿，聲音變得越沉悶。

分析：本句為“the+比較級， the+比較級”固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)，表示“越……越……”。

2. Also， each time he slid the box of rolled coins across the counter at the bank toward the cashier， he would shout proudly， “These are for my sons college fund. Hell never work at the mill all his life like me.”

語境：而且，每次他把裝著硬幣的盒子從柜臺那邊遞給銀行出納員的時(shí)候，他都會驕傲地大喊：“這是給我兒子上大學(xué)的基金。他不可能像我一樣，一輩子在工廠里工作。”

分析：本句中，each time是連詞短語，意為“每次……”。

Reading Check

閱讀上面的文章，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

When I married， I told my wife Susan about the significant part the lowly pickle jar had played in my life as a boy.? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?____________________________________________

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Paragraph 2：

She handed the daughter back to my father and led me into my parents bedroom.

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寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給短文之間邏輯連貫、銜接緊密，必須充分理解所給材料的大意，掌握作者想要傳達(dá)的意思。本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

二、提問構(gòu)思

基于原文本和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息并結(jié)合以上閱讀分析，采用圍繞中心提問相關(guān)問題的方法，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的兩段故事情節(jié)，一般分為三步。

第一步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段應(yīng)包括什么內(nèi)容。

根據(jù)第二段的段首句“她把女兒還給了父親，把我領(lǐng)進(jìn)了父母的臥室”可知，續(xù)寫第一段要寫“作者妻子和女兒之間的事”，這樣才能確保續(xù)寫的兩段是相銜接的。

第二步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思。

（1） Why did the author tell his wife of the pickle jar？

（2） What did the authors wife see in his parents bedroom？

（3） Why did the authors wife lead him to his parents bedroom？

第三步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思。

（1） What did the author see in his parents bedroom？

（2） How did the author feel when he saw his fathers pickle jar again？

（3） What would the author do when he saw his fathers pickle jar again？

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意情節(jié)連貫，各部分內(nèi)容相銜接，即：

1. 兩段的續(xù)寫與所給短文的銜接;

2. 每段的續(xù)寫與續(xù)寫段首句之間的銜接;

3. 續(xù)寫的兩段之間的銜接。

同時(shí)要注意語言風(fēng)格的一致和語法、句型以及所用詞語的準(zhǔn)確性。比如，刻畫人物形象時(shí)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)男稳菰~使其栩栩如生;描寫人物心理活動時(shí)使用一些動詞或副詞使其細(xì)微深入。