讀后續(xù)寫原創(chuàng)練習(xí)

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閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

At?the?age?of?8，?I?had?assumed?that?my?talent-show?disaster?meant?that?I?would?never?have?to?play?the?piano?again.?But?two?days?later，?after?school，?my?mother?came?out?of?the?kitchen?and?saw?me?watching?TV.“Turn?off?TV，”?she?called?from?the?kitchen.?Five?minutes?later.?I?didnt?move?an?inch.?And?then?I?decided，?I?didnt?have?to?do?what?mother?said?anymore.?I?wasnt?her?slave.“Four?clock，”?she?said?once?again，?louder.?“Im?not?going?to?play?anymore，”?I?said?coldly，?“Why?should?I？?Im?not?a?genius.”

“No！I?wont！”I?screamed.?She?switched?off?the?TV，?half?pulling，?half?carrying?me?towards?the?piano?as?I?kicked?the?throw?carpets?under?my?feet.

“You?want?me?to?be?something?that?Im?not！”I?cried.“?Ill?never?be?the?kind?of?daughter?you?want?me?to?be！”

“Only?two?kinds?of?daughters，”she?shouted?in?Chinese.“Those?who?are?obedient（順從的）and?those?who?follow?their?own?mind！?Only?one?kind?of?daughter?can?live?in?this?house.?Obedient?daughter！”

“Then?I?wish?I?werent?your?daughter，?I?wish?you?werent?my?mother.”And?thats?when?I?remembered?the?babies?she?had?lost?in?China，?the?ones?we?never?talked?about.“I?wish?I?were?dead！?Like?them！”

It?was?as?if?I?had?said?magic?words.?Alakazam！—her?face?went?blank，?her?mouth?closed，?and?she?backed?out?of?the?room，?stunned（目噔口呆），?as?if?she?were?blowing?away?like?a?small?brown?leaf，?thin，?lifeless.

It?was?not?the?only?disappointment?my?mother?felt?in?me.?In?the?years?that?followed，?I?failed?her?so?many?times，?each?time?insisting?my?own?will，?my?right?to?fall?short?of?expectations.?I?didnt?get?straight?As.?I?didnt?become?class?president.?I?didnt?get?into?Stanford.?I?dropped?out?of?college.

For?unlike?my?mother，?I?did?not?believe?I?could?be?anything?I?want?be.?I?could?only?be?me.

And?for?all?those?years?after?our?struggle?at?the?piano，?she?never?mentioned?my?playing?again.?The?lessons?stopped.?The?lid?（琴蓋）to?the?piano?was?closed，?shutting?out?the?dust，?my?misery，?and?her?dreams.?So?I?never?found?a?way?to?ask?her?why?she?had?hoped?for?something?so?large?that?failure?was?inevitable（不可避免的）.?And?even?worse，?I?never?asked?her?what?frightened?me?the?most：?Why?had?she?given?up?hope？

So?she?surprised?me.?A?few?years?ago?when?I?am?turning?30，?she?offered?to?give?me?the?piano，?for?my?thirtieth?birthday.

注意：

1.?續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為?150?詞左右。

2.?請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph?1：

I?saw?the?offer?as?a?sign?of?forgiveness，?a?tremendous（巨大的）burden?removed.____________________________________

Paragraph?2：

“Well，?I?probably?cant?play?anymore，”I?said.

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寫作指導(dǎo)

原文的主線是8歲孩子不愿彈鋼琴激怒母親，甚至傷害母親，最終讓母親失望，從停止彈鋼琴這件事起作者感覺(jué)自己很多事情都做不好，以為母親默默地放棄了她。直到她30歲時(shí)母親提出送她鋼琴，母女關(guān)系出現(xiàn)巨大變化。

續(xù)寫第一段第一句點(diǎn)明情節(jié)走向：從爭(zhēng)吵到和解。對(duì)應(yīng)材料的爭(zhēng)吵，續(xù)寫部分應(yīng)該描寫孩子對(duì)母親的生日禮物的心理反應(yīng)，對(duì)于過(guò)去自己所說(shuō)所做有所回應(yīng)——卸下憤怒和重負(fù)之后，是否有后悔和羞愧？

結(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段第一句，作者是有意接受鋼琴這份禮物，并且猶豫著要重新開(kāi)始彈鋼琴了。此時(shí)母親的反應(yīng)如何？由前文和常識(shí)可推想母親對(duì)我的期望和愛(ài)之殷切和深沉，此段對(duì)話應(yīng)是鼓勵(lì)式的。那么接下來(lái)情節(jié)對(duì)作者受到鼓勵(lì)后嘗試?play，?考生可延續(xù)材料進(jìn)行一些動(dòng)作描寫和心理描寫，從多年后重新彈鋼琴感悟到母親當(dāng)初的用心良苦。

參考范文

I?saw?the?offer?as?a?sign?of?forgiveness，?a?tremendous?burden?removed.?Never?had?I?expected??this?gift.?“Are?you?sure？”?I?asked?shyly.?“I?mean，?wont?you?and?Dad?miss?it？”?“No，?this?is?your?piano，”?she?replied?firmly.?“Always?your?piano.?Only?you?can?play.”?Driven?by?remorse（懊悔），?I?hesitated?more?for?all?those?heart-breaking?words?I?said?and?the?wrongs?I?done.“Take?it，”she?asserted.

“Well，?I?probably?cant?play?anymore?after?so?many?years.”I?said.?“You?pick?up?fast.?You?could?be?a?genius?if?you?want?to.?You?are?just?not?trying.”She?was?neither?angry?nor?sad.?She?declared?it?as?if?to?announce?a?fact?that?could?never?be?disproved.?So?I?played?a?few?bars，?surprised?at?how?easily?the?notes?came?back.?After?playing?a?few?more?times?what?I?had?practiced?as?a?child，?which?for?the?first?time?started?to?make?sense，?I?finally?came?to?read?her?thoughts.

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