Julie’s Wolf Pack (Excerpt IX) 《朱莉的狼群》（節(jié)選九）

瓊·克雷格黑德·喬治

Kapu suddenly pricked up his ears and looked toward the Avalik River. With a swing of his tail he bounded down the embankment and trotted along the shore to meet Willow Pup Julie.

“Kapu，” she called. “Kapu， Im back.” He knew why she had come. He did not take time to adjust to her presence but let her scramble up the embankment to the playground.

“Ee-lie.” She dropped to her knees. “The little pups are sick.”

She picked up listless Tiny Whimper. Silver and Aaka watched intently. Willow Pup Julie whimpered wolf pup talk and stroked the little head. She held one limp paw between her fingers.

“Kapu，” she said， “I must take the pups home， all right？ I will feed them rich milk from bottles. When they are strong， I will return them to you.” Kapu stared into her eyes. He understood her intent by the mothering tone in her voice. He did not take the pup back， nor did Silver come for them. Julie tucked fragile Tiny Whimper into her parka and glanced at Aaka and Sweet Fur Amy to see if they objected. They did not reach for the puppy. Their alpha had not， so they would not. Kapu was beginning to direct the behavior of the pack. The pups would go with Willow Pup Julie. Although they responded to Kapus wish， each individual quickly expressed its feelings. Aaka walked to Kapus side and nuzzled his chin. Sweet Fur Amy took a deep breath of Julie in through her nostrils and relaxed her tail and face. The pups were in loving hands. Silver lay wearily on her side， and Raw Bones slunk off to the top of the embankment， put his head on his paws， and rumbled a protest from deep in his chest. Zing， the loyal beta， kept his eye on the disgruntled Raw Bones， whose rank was about to sink to an all-time low without the pups.

Kapu was close to achieving the highest form of wolf government—leadership that holds strong individuals together but allows for personalities and feelings. Kapu was close to greatness. He lifted his head high.

Feeling the pack was with her， Willow Pup Julie put No Growl into her parka with Tiny Whimper and pressed them close to her body.

“Theyll be all right，” she said， locking her gaze on Silvers golden eyes. The mother looked away. After a moment she turned and looked unblinkingly into Julies eyes. “Trust” was the message. With a soft whimper of affection， Willow Pup Julie walked down the embankment to the rivers edge and strode off along it. Released from ice by the sun， the water chortled and leaped beside her， accompanying her happy song—“Pups， little pups， little pups.”

卡普突然豎起耳朵，朝著阿瓦里克河方向看去。他甩了甩尾巴，大步跑下河堤，然后沿著河邊小跑著去迎接柳樹娃朱莉。

“卡普，”朱莉喊道，“卡普，我回來了?！笨ㄆ罩乐炖?yàn)槭裁椿貋?。他沒有來得及問候朱莉，就讓她爬上河堤來到狼群的家門口。

“哎呀，”朱莉跪到地上，說，“小狼崽兒們病了。”

朱莉抱起無精打采的小啜泣。銀白和阿卡在一旁專注地看著。柳樹娃朱莉一邊撫摸著小狼崽兒的頭，一邊嗚嗚地學(xué)狼崽兒的叫聲。朱莉握著一只無力的狼爪。

“卡普，”她說，“我必須把狼崽兒帶回家，好嗎？我會(huì)拿瓶子喂他們好奶水。等他們長得強(qiáng)壯了，就把他們還給你?！笨ㄆ斩⒅炖虻难劬础闹炖虼葠鄣穆曇衾?，卡普明白了朱莉的意圖。卡普沒有奪回狼崽兒，銀白也沒有跑過來搶奪。朱莉把脆弱的小啜泣裹到自己的大衣里，又瞥了一眼阿卡和香毛艾米，看她們是不是反對(duì)。她們也沒有過來搶奪狼崽兒。她們的頭狼沒有這么做，她們也不會(huì)?？ㄆ找呀?jīng)開始主導(dǎo)狼群的行為。狼崽兒們會(huì)被柳樹娃朱莉帶走。他們順從了卡普的意愿，但每一只狼也都很快表示出自己的感情。阿卡走到卡普身邊，用鼻子蹭了蹭他的下巴。香毛艾米用鼻子深吸了一口朱莉的氣味，然后尾巴放松了，臉上的表情也放松了。狼崽兒是交到富有愛心的人手里了。銀白疲憊地側(cè)臥在地上。而生骨偷偷溜到河堤高處，頭趴在前爪上，胸腔深處發(fā)出咕嚕聲，表示抗議。津，忠誠的副頭領(lǐng)，盯著心懷不滿的生骨。這一下，沒有了狼崽兒，生骨在狼群的地位要一落千丈，跌落谷底。

卡普已經(jīng)接近狼群治理的最高境界了——在他的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)下，每一只狼都能團(tuán)結(jié)起來，同時(shí)得以保持個(gè)性和情感?？ㄆ找呀?jīng)接近狼群頭領(lǐng)的偉大境界。于是卡普高高昂起了頭。

柳樹娃朱莉察覺到狼群跟她的想法一致，就把不吼也放進(jìn)自己的大衣，跟小啜泣放在一起，讓他們緊緊貼著自己的身子。

“他們會(huì)好好的。”朱莉盯著銀白金黃色的眼睛說。狼媽媽銀白把眼睛轉(zhuǎn)向一邊。過了一會(huì)兒，銀白轉(zhuǎn)過頭，眼睛一眨不眨地盯著朱莉的眼睛——意思是“我信任你”。朱莉親昵地輕輕哼了一聲，走下河堤，沿著河邊大步往遠(yuǎn)處走去。陽光融化了河面的堅(jiān)冰，河水汩汩流淌，在朱莉身邊跳躍著，給朱莉快樂的歌聲伴奏——“狼崽兒，小狼崽兒，小狼崽兒”。

【背景知識(shí)】生骨和銀白生下的狼崽兒病了。通過遙望觀察，朱莉知道了這一情況，于是親自來救治狼崽兒。從狼群里帶走狼崽兒不是一件容易的事，多虧朱莉跟狼群相處多年，頗得狼群的信任，她才能平平安安帶走兩只生病的小狼。這一選段描述了朱莉跟狼群交流的細(xì)節(jié)，細(xì)致逼真。

【第一段】第一段原文使用的動(dòng)詞細(xì)膩準(zhǔn)確。首先是bound。查閱在線柯林斯詞典，這一詞語的解釋是：If a person or animal bounds in a particular direction， they move quickly with large steps or jumps. 因此譯文使用了“大步跑”。另外一個(gè)詞是trot，意思又有所不同：When an animal such as a horse trots， it moves fairly fast， taking quick small steps. You can also say that the rider of the animal is trotting. 譯文使用了“小跑”。

【第二段】第二句中的He did not take time to adjust to her presence 如果直譯會(huì)是“卡普沒有花時(shí)間適應(yīng)朱莉的到來”，太難懂。實(shí)際上這一句是說卡普本來應(yīng)該跟好久不見的朱莉親熱一番，問候一下，卻等不及，就直接讓朱莉去探望生病的狼崽兒了。譯文直接翻譯了原文的深層含義。另外，這里的動(dòng)詞scramble也使用得極為準(zhǔn)確生動(dòng)：If you scramble over rocks or up a hill， you move quickly over them or up it using your hands to help you. 朱莉迫不及待要照料生病的狼崽兒，所以直接爬上了河堤。英文playground一般指孩子們的游樂場，此處指狼窩附近的游玩場所，譯文直接使用了“家門口”，因?yàn)槔侨旱摹坝螛穲觥甭犉饋砗芄帧?/p>

【第三段】這一段和第六段有兩個(gè)狼崽兒的名字需要翻譯。譯文盡力保持原文的特色，仍然根據(jù)詞意來翻譯名字，分別為“小啜泣”和“不吼”。英文中的人名一般不強(qiáng)調(diào)意義，但人們一般會(huì)給寵物或動(dòng)物起有意義的名字。文學(xué)作品英譯漢時(shí)，如果名字強(qiáng)調(diào)字面意思，就可以翻譯意義，如果字面意義不重要，則可以采取音譯。

【第四段】第二句中的rich milk本意是“營養(yǎng)豐富的奶水”，過于繁瑣，譯文簡化為“好奶水”。香毛艾米的特長是嗅覺靈敏，所以她聞了一下朱莉，確定她沒有敵意，因此尾巴放松，“臉上表情”也放松了。譯文添加了“表情”（“狼的臉”在中文里很少用）。這一段逐個(gè)描寫狼群的表情和姿態(tài)，活靈活現(xiàn)。副頭領(lǐng)津看到生骨生悶氣，頗有幸災(zāi)樂禍的味道。

【第五段】譯文使用了范疇詞“境界”來描述卡普的進(jìn)步。包括生骨在內(nèi)，狼群中的所有成員現(xiàn)在都臣服在卡普腳下了，所以卡普顯得“偉大”。

【第六段】原文中簡單的短語with her，在譯文中被明晰化為“跟她的想法一致”，否則不容易理解。“不吼”的稱呼有意思，讓人聯(lián)想到金庸《笑傲江湖》中的不戒和尚。

【第七段】第四句“‘Trust was the message.”十分簡潔，譯文對(duì)應(yīng)為“意思是‘我信任你”。最后幾句話描寫的場景十分動(dòng)人：河面解凍，河水汩汩，朱莉的歌聲響起，讓人產(chǎn)生了無限遐想。

【小結(jié)】該選段的原文特點(diǎn)是用詞精確、描寫細(xì)膩。譯文也需要根據(jù)情況使用恰當(dāng)?shù)闹形脑~語，并在一些短句中添加必要成分，讓中文句子通順完整。至于原文中特別細(xì)膩的場面描寫，譯文也要盡力再現(xiàn)，同時(shí)保證中文簡潔生動(dòng)。