慕子杰
敞開思想,任意想象。你所寫下的真情流露的文字,都是在訴說著那充滿溫度的生活。同學們,提起筆,傾情去創(chuàng)作吧我們終將蛻變,寫出更多具有生命力的文章。
自然界中有亭亭玉立的水仙花,婀娜多姿的荷花,小巧的迎春花,閃閃發(fā)光的滿天星……然而我最喜歡的還是香味濃郁、小巧可愛的桂花。
桂花很常見,幾乎每個公園都有。
桂花樹長得不是很高,但是滿樹小巧可愛的、像小毛球一樣的、金黃色的小花,在綠葉的襯托下更顯得迷人。近看桂花,你會發(fā)現(xiàn)它的花瓣少,最多也就是四五片,只要你輕輕一碰,它們便爭先恐后地飄落下來,仿佛下了一場桂花雨。地上一層金色的桂花,仿佛一張地毯,踩上去軟綿綿的。
桂花的香氣非常的濃郁,盛開的時候整個公園都浸在桂花香里,令人陶醉,使入神清氣爽。你瞧,勤勞的小蜜蜂、小蝴蝶都被桂花的香氣吸引來了,在桂花叢中翩翩起舞。
看著看著,一股又一股濃郁的香氣飄來,把我籠罩在其中,似乎我也在生根發(fā)芽,長成一株桂花樹!
【教師點評】
小作者的細致觀察和恰當?shù)男揶o手法的運用,使文章讀起來那么的美,仿佛置身于花香之中。
(指導老師:高靜)
My winter vacation
I had a nice winter vacation,short but fun.
On my winter vacation. I went back to my hometown with my parents. We were very happy.After a four-hour drive. we arrived in Meizhou. I was so excited that I can't wait to see my deargrandma. Some days later,I went to Fujian with my parents and friends. First, we went to seean old wall. Then we walked in a long old street, there were some milk tea shops, food stores,clothing stores, toy shops and so on. We felt very excited when we saw the beautiful sceneries.
The next day, we went back to Dongguan. It was a wonderful trip, wasn't it?
(指導老師:袁柏勤)