2018年12月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析（三）

賈從永

四級(jí)

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the challenges of studying abroad. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這篇大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文是一篇說(shuō)明文，要求考生闡述出國(guó)留學(xué)的各種挑戰(zhàn)。這種類(lèi)型作文只需把問(wèn)題說(shuō)清楚即可，沒(méi)有多少議論。大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四、六級(jí)作文主要考察學(xué)生的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)能力，對(duì)觀點(diǎn)和材料是否新穎沒(méi)有要求，因此我們?cè)陉U述出國(guó)留學(xué)的挑戰(zhàn)時(shí)，最好根據(jù)自己的知識(shí)儲(chǔ)備，選擇自己最熟悉的方面來(lái)寫(xiě)，不要為了別出心裁而去寫(xiě)自己沒(méi)有把握的東西，那等于自己給自己出難題。

這篇作文可以寫(xiě)成三段。引言段先指出現(xiàn)在有越來(lái)越多的中國(guó)學(xué)生夢(mèng)想出國(guó)留學(xué)，然后指出到國(guó)外留學(xué)也有其挑戰(zhàn)，最后指出如果你打算出國(guó)留學(xué)，需要為之做好準(zhǔn)備。主體段詳細(xì)闡述出國(guó)留學(xué)的各種挑戰(zhàn)。中國(guó)學(xué)生在國(guó)外留學(xué)時(shí)可能會(huì)遇到各種各樣的挑戰(zhàn)，比如語(yǔ)言障礙、飲食差異、文化差異、種族歧視、治安欠佳、教育模式迥異等。我們不妨挑選最常見(jiàn)的兩個(gè)方面來(lái)寫(xiě)：思念家人，語(yǔ)言障礙。在闡述出國(guó)留學(xué)的挑戰(zhàn)的同時(shí)，我們最好還順便給出應(yīng)對(duì)這個(gè)挑戰(zhàn)的建議。比如，說(shuō)到思念家人時(shí)，不妨建議嘗試一下徒步旅行、游泳或者登山等活動(dòng)，以讓自己的生活充實(shí)起來(lái)不再想家;說(shuō)到語(yǔ)言障礙時(shí)，不妨指出只要把自己沉浸在這種語(yǔ)言當(dāng)中，語(yǔ)言障礙問(wèn)題不久便會(huì)消失。本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾，先指出有挑戰(zhàn)才會(huì)成長(zhǎng)，因?yàn)槟憧倳?huì)把挑戰(zhàn)轉(zhuǎn)化為學(xué)習(xí)的機(jī)會(huì)，最后預(yù)測(cè)一旦戰(zhàn)勝挑戰(zhàn)，留學(xué)生活就會(huì)一帆風(fēng)順。下面請(qǐng)看范文：

A growing number of Chinese students now dream of studying abroad. However， studying in a foreign country， though a rewarding experience， comes with its own share of challenges. If you plan to study overseas， here are two top challenges to be prepared for.

The first challenge is homesickness. You will find yourself missing your folks back home like crazy， especially in the first few months abroad. Don’t worry. You can try such activities as hiking， swimming or mountain-climbing to keep yourself busy. Another challenge is the language barrier. You may be fluent in the language of your host country， but you will still have a hard time being understood and understanding the locals. Take it easy. As long as you immerse yourself in the language， this problem will disappear very soon.

It is said that without obstacles you cannot grow， for you can always turn a challenge into a learning opportunity. Actually， once you triumph over the challenges， your overseas studying will be smooth sailing. （165 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. However， studying in a foreign country， though a rewarding experience， comes with its own share of challenges. 然而，出國(guó)留學(xué)雖是一種有益的經(jīng)歷，但也有自己的挑戰(zhàn)。come with具有。one’s own share of自己的。

2. If you plan to study overseas， here are two top challenges to be prepared for. 如果你計(jì)劃出國(guó)留學(xué)，有兩個(gè)最重要的挑戰(zhàn)需要你有所準(zhǔn)備。top最重要的。

3. You will find yourself missing your folks back home like crazy， especially in the first few months abroad. 你會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)自己瘋狂地思念家里的親人，尤其是在國(guó)外最初的幾個(gè)月里。folks家人，親人，（尤指）父母。like crazy瘋狂地。

4. You may be fluent in the language of your host country， but you will still have a hard time being understood and understanding the locals. 雖然也許你能流利地說(shuō)所去留學(xué)國(guó)家的語(yǔ)言，但你還是難以被聽(tīng)懂和聽(tīng)懂當(dāng)?shù)厝苏f(shuō)話(huà)。may盡管，或許，用于承認(rèn)情況屬實(shí)，后面一般有but與之相呼應(yīng)。have a hard/difficult time doing sth難以做某事。

5. Actually， once you triumph over the challenges， your overseas studying will be smooth sailing. 實(shí)際上，一旦你克服了這些挑戰(zhàn)，你的留學(xué)生活將會(huì)一帆風(fēng)順。actually實(shí)際上，此處修飾整個(gè)句子，表示對(duì)上文信息做進(jìn)一步補(bǔ)充。triumph over戰(zhàn)勝，克服。smooth sailing一帆風(fēng)順。

六級(jí)

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on how to balance work and leisure. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

2018年12月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)六級(jí)考試的三道作文試題屬于解決問(wèn)題型，涉及如何平衡學(xué)習(xí)與課外活動(dòng)、工作與休閑、工作責(zé)任與個(gè)人興趣。這種類(lèi)型的作文要求考生闡述某個(gè)問(wèn)題的解決方法。比如，本題要求考生闡述如何平衡工作與休閑。我們?cè)谡J(rèn)真審題后就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)，這道題目既不是要論述工作的重要性，也不是要論述休閑的重要性，而是要論述怎樣安排好工作和休閑，以利于自己的身心健康。

本文可以寫(xiě)成三個(gè)段落。引言段引用本文討論的話(huà)題，我們可以先借用英國(guó)前首相丘吉爾的論述，列舉出三類(lèi)不會(huì)平衡工作與休閑的人，然后指出如果你覺(jué)得難以平衡工作與休閑，下面的建議可能對(duì)你有用。主體段提出保持工作和休閑之間平衡的具體建議。由于現(xiàn)代人大多過(guò)度專(zhuān)注于工作，以至于工作與休閑失衡，影響到自己的生活質(zhì)量乃至身心健康。所以本文的寫(xiě)作重點(diǎn)可放在如何安排休閑活動(dòng)，以避免把自己累垮。具體可以從三個(gè)方面展開(kāi)：第一，劃清職業(yè)生活和個(gè)人生活之間的界限。告訴同事自己下班后不會(huì)回復(fù)與工作有關(guān)的短信。第二，把工作留給工作。下班后不妨去健身房鍛煉，或者和親友一起出去玩。第三，給自己留一些個(gè)人時(shí)間做自己最喜歡的事，比如讀讀書(shū)、看看電視或者泡個(gè)熱水澡。結(jié)尾段可以先指出平衡工作與休閑并不容易，然后指出能夠把工作和個(gè)人生活結(jié)合起來(lái)對(duì)于一個(gè)人的身心健康至關(guān)重要。因?yàn)樗自?huà)說(shuō)得好：只工作不玩耍，聰明的人也變傻。下面請(qǐng)看范文：

Sir Winston Churchill divided human beings into three classes： those who toiled to death， those who are worried to death， and those who are bored to death. If you are one of those who find it hard balancing work and leisure， here are some pointers for you.

First， draw a line between your professional and personal life. For example， tell your colleagues that you won’t answer work-related messages after work. Or else you will end up working 24/7 and burning yourself out. Second， forget your work after you clock off. You may as well spend your leisure time working out at a gym or hanging out with your family or friends. Third， set aside some me time. Always find time to do what you enjoy most – be it reading a book， watching your favorite television show or indulging in a nice hot bath.

Finding a healthy balance between work and leisure is not easy. But the ability to successfully combine work and personal life is essential for your physical and mental wellbeing， as all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. （184 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. If you are one of those who find it hard balancing work and leisure， here are some pointers for you. 如果你覺(jué)得難以平衡工作與休閑，有一些建議適合你。pointer建議。

2. Or else you will end up working 24/7 and burning yourself out. 否則你會(huì)一星期每天工作24小時(shí)，把自己累垮。or （else）否則。end up結(jié)果，后面一般跟形容詞、動(dòng)名詞或介詞短語(yǔ)表示某種不好的結(jié)果。burn oneself out把自己累垮。

3. You may as well spend your leisure time working out at a gym or hanging out with your family or friends. 你不如在業(yè)余時(shí)間去健身房鍛煉或者和親友一起出去玩。may as well不妨，不如，表示建議。work out鍛煉。hang out閑逛。

4. Third， set aside some me time. 第三，留一些個(gè)人時(shí)間。set aside留出。me time個(gè)人時(shí)間。

5. Always find time to do what you enjoy most – be it reading a book， watching your favorite television show or indulging in a nice hot bath. 總是抽些時(shí)間做自己最喜歡的事情，不管是讀讀書(shū)、看看喜歡的電視節(jié)目，還是盡情地泡個(gè)熱水澡。indulge in盡情享受。nice很，非常，修飾表示積極意義的形容詞。

6. But the ability to successfully combine work and personal life is essential for your physical and mental wellbeing， as all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. 但是，能夠成功地把工作和個(gè)人生活結(jié)合起來(lái)對(duì)于你的身心健康非常重要，因?yàn)橹还ぷ鞑煌嫠?，聰明的人也變傻?/p>