Pop Music

石繼忠

Do you like pop music？ I like it very much. Which pop star do you like best？ I like Han Hong. She sings very good①. I think she is the best singer in China.

Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well. So I dont like them. If a singer sings very well， he will have a lot of fans， even though he is not handsome. If a singer sings well and has good looking② at the same time， it will be perfect. He must be well loved by his fans. Such singers are Song Zuying， Emil Wakin Chau， Jay Chou， Andy Lau and so on.

Pop music is popular among young people all over the world. It can even make you to③ forget your unhappiness， worries and anger. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a long life.

山東梁山揚(yáng)營(yíng)中學(xué)八年級(jí)（6）班 王慶彬

點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

該文章寫(xiě)的是作者對(duì)流行音樂(lè)的喜愛(ài)，并對(duì)流行音樂(lè)及歌手的實(shí)力與相貌發(fā)表了自己的看法。全文結(jié)構(gòu)安排合理，語(yǔ)句通順，層次清晰。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①good改為well。修飾動(dòng)詞用well。

②looking改為looks。looks意為“外貌”。

③去掉to。make sb. do sth.意為“使某人做某事”。

④to改為for。be good for意為“對(duì)……有好處”。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿(mǎn)分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。endprint