開(kāi)放式短文寫(xiě)作Ⅰ

案例一

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

A man who fears suffering is already suffering from what he fears.

注意：

1. 無(wú)須寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

4. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

寫(xiě)作思路和注意事項(xiàng)

首先要注意審題，把題目的意思看清楚。這個(gè)題目的意思是說(shuō)“怕苦者正因?yàn)榕露唷?，因此我們不要害怕困難，要克服恐懼心理從而戰(zhàn)勝困難。在第一段里，大家要開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，清楚明確地點(diǎn)題，然后用一個(gè)具體的事例來(lái)支持自己的觀點(diǎn)。注意事例一定要和自己表達(dá)的中心思想緊密結(jié)合。并且事例要寫(xiě)出時(shí)間，事情的經(jīng)過(guò)、發(fā)展和結(jié)果。最后一段歸納總結(jié)，呼應(yīng)或升華文章中心。

范文

Such is human nature that we will be frightened when meeting with trials and tribulations， which turns out to be unnecessary in reality. It is not the hardships but the fear caused by those that makes us scared. If we can ignore the thought of fear or face it bravely， we will surely overcome the difficulties no matter how hard they are， as it did in the following case.

In the depth of my memory， I was not good at math in junior middle school. I always felt nervous before the math exam came. But the more scared I felt， the lower grades I had. Little by little， I realized that fear didnt help at all. So I tried to face it. Feeling fearless and calmer， I managed to be buried in my math study， thus making great progress in the last exam.

Based on the story above， I hold the view that we should work hard to improve the present situation but not to fear it. As a matter of fact， working hard is the most effective way to get over our fear.

點(diǎn)評(píng)

這篇文章審題準(zhǔn)確無(wú)誤，內(nèi)容切題，應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯準(zhǔn)確，句型多變，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂昧苏Z(yǔ)句間的連接成分，全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

第一段思路很清晰，先用such引導(dǎo)的倒裝句引出“害怕困難是人之常情”，用which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句說(shuō)明“在現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中沒(méi)有必要害怕”，為什么呢？接著用一個(gè)強(qiáng)調(diào)句型強(qiáng)調(diào)“是我們所想的而不是困難本身讓我們害怕”。最后提出自己的觀點(diǎn)“如果我們不去想恐懼或能勇敢地面對(duì)它，我們就肯定能克服苦難?！焙竺嫖恼逻€用as引導(dǎo)了一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句承上啟下，引出下面的例子。

第二段一開(kāi)始用in the depth of my memory 這個(gè)介詞短語(yǔ)導(dǎo)入事例：在初中由于害怕與緊張，自己的數(shù)學(xué)一直不好。這里the more...，the more... 結(jié)構(gòu)用得很好，突出了害怕導(dǎo)致的不良后果“越害怕，考得就越差”，后來(lái)意識(shí)到害怕根本沒(méi)用，就決定面對(duì)它并想辦法克服它。little by little， so 這些詞都使全文更連貫。最后一句話也寫(xiě)得很好，用動(dòng)詞ing形式作狀語(yǔ)，后又用thus doing引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)，使文章顯得很緊湊。

第三段用based on結(jié)構(gòu)承上啟下，I hold the view that ... 引出自己的觀點(diǎn)，最后用as a matter of fact 連接克服困難的辦法。全文連貫，一氣呵成。

案例二

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合具體事例，發(fā)表自己的見(jiàn)解。

Neither a wise man nor a brave man lies down on the tracks of history to wait for the train of the future to run over them.

注意：

1. 開(kāi)頭已給出，無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

4.文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

5. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

寫(xiě)作思路和注意事項(xiàng)

這是美國(guó)第七位總統(tǒng)艾森豪威爾說(shuō)過(guò)的一句話，意思是“聰明人和勇敢者都不會(huì)躺在歷史的車(chē)輪前，等著未來(lái)的火車(chē)從他們身上壓過(guò)”。那么我們到底該怎么寫(xiě)呢？這句話意思就是過(guò)去的已經(jīng)過(guò)去，未來(lái)還沒(méi)到，沒(méi)有必要瞻前顧后。文章的開(kāi)頭要直接點(diǎn)題：我們要做的就是要把握住現(xiàn)在，從現(xiàn)在做起。事例可寫(xiě)因?yàn)槌两谝郧暗臉s耀中，一度生活得不愉快，經(jīng)過(guò)調(diào)整，終于融入了現(xiàn)實(shí)生活。在結(jié)尾，對(duì)“忘掉過(guò)去，把握現(xiàn)在”這一主題再作呼吁。endprint

范文

As is illustrated from the above sentence， people tend to miss those days that have gone and expect the days that havent come. Actually， instead of missing what cant be seized， it is of greater significance to try our best to make full use of the present.

There was one time when I was lost in depression at the beginning of high school because it was hard for me to adjust to the new environment which was not what I had expected before. Therefore， I always missed the glorious days before and imagined what would happen in the future. Nevertheless， nothing has changed. What we can do， in fact， is to cherish the present and make good use of it. It was not until I realized it that I could adapt myself to the new life. Then I began to become part of the class， thus finding life was also enjoyable.

As Tagore says in his verse， if you shed tears when you miss the sun， you also miss the stars； that is to say yesterday is a history， tomorrow is a mystery， but today is a gift，which is why it is called present. So， we should seize and cherish our present！

點(diǎn)評(píng)

整篇文章思維縝密，條理清晰，結(jié)合高中生的生活實(shí)例給人很親切的感覺(jué)。文章開(kāi)頭利用提示語(yǔ)點(diǎn)題：我們不能留戀過(guò)去，想著未來(lái)，重要的是把握好現(xiàn)在。第二自然段結(jié)合剛上高中時(shí)的經(jīng)歷，進(jìn)一步印證前面的主題。結(jié)尾用泰戈?duì)柕脑?shī)句“假如你為失去太陽(yáng)而落淚，你也同樣會(huì)失去群星”引出下文，并巧用present這一雙關(guān)詞結(jié)束并總結(jié)全文。

這篇文章的連貫性很好，首段使用了As is illustrated from the above sentence引出下文，中間段用There was one time when ... 舉例說(shuō)明，結(jié)尾用As Tagore says in his verse引出詩(shī)句。本文還用了actually， therefore， nevertheless， in fact， etc. 連貫全文。此外本文還使用了定語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句，強(qiáng)調(diào)句型等。

案例三

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合具體事例，發(fā)表自己的見(jiàn)解。

Life is like a heavy truck， so happiness and sorrow are like the two wheels. No cross， no crown. No pain， no joy. There are two different minds. One thinks happiness depends on material life； the other argues happiness lies in spiritual life. So what is the happiness in our life？

注意：

1. 開(kāi)頭已給出，無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

4.文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

5. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

寫(xiě)作思路和注意事項(xiàng)

這篇英語(yǔ)提示的重點(diǎn)在最后一句話，幸福是什么？取決于物質(zhì)方面還是精神方面？我們?cè)趯?xiě)的時(shí)候最好在首段直接陳述自己的觀點(diǎn)，然后再舉例說(shuō)明。

范文

Many people tend to link happiness to money， which is， in my opinion， a fairly wrong idea. There is no denying that money is of great importance in our daily life， but it doesnt mean that the more money you possess， the happier a life you will live. Therefore， happiness doesnt lie in substances but in our hearts.

In the book Three Days to see， Helen says when she has experienced the loss of the things taken for granted， she lives her life with more appreciation. Whether were rich or poor， healthy or disabled， as long as we live every day with appreciation， we can always see that life is full of surprise， warmth， and happiness.endprint

As far as I am concerned， it is the spiritual life rather than material basis that determines whether you will be happy. There is a limit to what money can do while spiritual wealth can bring you a sense of fulfillment and happiness. Love your own life and life will reward you with bright sunshine， gentle breeze and most importantly， pure and simple happiness.

點(diǎn)評(píng)

本文思路清晰，開(kāi)頭就陳述了自己的觀點(diǎn)Therefore， happiness doesnt lie in substances but in our hearts. 第二段舉了海倫凱勒的事例，陳述了她對(duì)幸福的理解。最后一段進(jìn)行總結(jié)，發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)：it is the spiritual life rather than material basis that determines whether you will be happy.如果我們能盡情地享受生活，那么生活也會(huì)賦予我們豐厚的饋贈(zèng)。

本文內(nèi)容切題，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、得體，句式豐富，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂昧苏Z(yǔ)句間的連接成分，表明作者具備了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。

【練習(xí)】

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

Perhaps you are always very confident， but do you have the patience to wait a little longer when youre in despair？

注意：

1. 開(kāi)頭已給出，無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

4. 文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

5. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

We may not be able to do better than everyone else to be Number One， but we are able to improve ourselves all the time. Those who are always trying to improve themselves are the real heroes.

注意：

1. 開(kāi)頭已給出，無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

4.文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

5. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

“I thank God for my handicaps， for， through them， I have found myself， my work， and my God.” —Helen Keller

注意：

1. 開(kāi)頭已給出，無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；

2. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

3. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

4.文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

5. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

Many things are important in our life， such as friendship， love， family， health， life（生命）， the environment we live in and so on. Sometimes， we never know what we have got until it is gone. We should learn to cherish.

注意：

1. 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；

2. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；

3. 文中不得透漏個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；

4. 詞數(shù)為120左右。

5. 請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合你生活中的一件事，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

Sharing is something that is learned as we progress through life. We share food and books. We even share knowledge and ideas. By sharing， we are helped or help people in need. By sharing， we contribute to society. By sharing we lead a meaningful life.

注意：

1. 無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)。

2. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的一個(gè)事例。

3. 詞數(shù)120字左右。

請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合你生活中的一件事，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

Stress is a natural part of everyday life and there is no way to avoid it. How do you look at stress？ How do you handle pressure in your life？

結(jié)合事例說(shuō)明，在面對(duì)壓力時(shí)，你是如何調(diào)適的。

注意：

1. 無(wú)需寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)。

2. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的一個(gè)事例。

3. 詞數(shù)120字左右。endprint