My School Trip to the Park

Last week， our school organized a trip to the park. It is so memorable that I still feel excited when I recall it.

To get to the park as fast as possible， we took the bus instead of walking there. As soon as we got off the bus， we saw a big park gate which was decorated with colorful flowers. After wandering around the park， we decided to have a picnic. We sat on the grass， enjoying the delicious food and the beautiful nature view. What’s more， we also climbed the mountain to enjoy the fresh air. Finally， we went back to school.

Although time went fast， I had a good time there. This activity not only enables me to embrace the nature closely， but also gives me a chance to relax from the heavy schoolwork. How meaningful it is！

河南省鄭州金桂中學(xué)

指導(dǎo)老師 盧 婷

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文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，銜接自然流暢。第一段自然點(diǎn)題，第二段對(duì)到公園的學(xué)校旅行進(jìn)行了生動(dòng)形象的描述，最后一段總結(jié)全文，闡明此次旅行的意義和“我”的感悟。其中，好詞好句也應(yīng)用自如，如“memorable”“ as fast as possible”“instead of”“decorated with”“not only... but also...”“embrace the nature”等，運(yùn)用非常靈活，值得借鑒。