Wang Ming's Progress

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任新超男，湖北省襄陽(yáng)市東津新區(qū)金源中學(xué)優(yōu)秀教師，從事教育工作多年；在省級(jí)刊物上發(fā)表過(guò)若干篇論文；曾在襄陽(yáng)廣播電視臺(tái)英語(yǔ)新聞欄目擔(dān)任播音員；曾獲得湖北省微課比賽三等獎(jiǎng)、襄陽(yáng)市微課一等獎(jiǎng)、襄陽(yáng)市教學(xué)能手、襄陽(yáng)市青教賽三等獎(jiǎng)、公開(kāi)課教學(xué)競(jìng)賽一等獎(jiǎng)等榮譽(yù)稱號(hào)；指導(dǎo)的學(xué)生在各類競(jìng)賽中取得了出色成績(jī)，多人獲得省級(jí)獎(jiǎng)和地市級(jí)獎(jiǎng)。

Wang Ming is my classmate. He has made great progress this term.

In the past， he used to fight with others. But now he is used to makingfriends with his classmates. He used to spend much time play computer games.However， he takes an active part in all activities now. He often ate junk foodbefore and he seldom went out for a walk. But now he has good habits. Such as，he always eats vegetables and fresh fruit， and he goes for walk every day. Heused to eat food and sleep in class， so he used to fail his exams. But now helistens to the teacher carefully and always finishes the homework well in time.

Wang Ming has changed a lot because his hard work. I hope that he will be better and better in the future.

湖北省襄陽(yáng)市東津新區(qū)金源中學(xué) 周芷伊

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

作者通過(guò)對(duì)比王明過(guò)去和現(xiàn)在的行為，清晰地展示了王明的變化。全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、語(yǔ)言流暢，是一篇不錯(cuò)的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

①play 改成playing。spend time doing sth.意為“花時(shí)間做某事”。

② Such as 改成For example。舉例時(shí)such as 接名詞或名詞短語(yǔ)，for example 接句子。

③because 改成because of。表原因時(shí)because of 接名詞或名詞短語(yǔ)，because 接句子。

評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分15 分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13分。