A Blog Post from My Brother

Today I showed two foreign friends visit淤our city—Shijiazhuang. We set offby car from the Friendship Hotel at 8 a.m. We first went to Peoples Park. We wereall struck by its beautiful flowers on show. Then we visited the City Museum. Wesaw a plenty of于valuable things and learnt more about the city from them. Afterthat， we went to Xibaipo by car. It is a beautiful place of interest in our city， andwe enjoyed the wonderful scenery of Taihang Mountain from there盂. We had adelicious lunch at Xibaipo Red Flag Restaurant and came back at 2：20 p.m.

All the foreign friends were pleased under my arrangements. We did have agood time today.

河北省阜城縣第四中學(xué) 路青林

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張超

男，河北省衡水市阜城縣第四中學(xué)高級(jí)英語(yǔ)教師、縣骨干教師、市優(yōu)秀英語(yǔ)教師，從事英語(yǔ)教育教學(xué)工作30 多年；多年來，在省級(jí)以上報(bào)刊發(fā)表文章數(shù)百篇，并有多篇文章獲獎(jiǎng)；曾參與多本教輔資料的編寫工作；曾榮獲“中央教育科學(xué)研究所全國(guó)基礎(chǔ)教育科研先進(jìn)個(gè)人”榮譽(yù)稱號(hào)；曾多次輔導(dǎo)多名學(xué)生在市、省和國(guó)家級(jí)英語(yǔ)競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。

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優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文分享了一次石家莊之旅，按時(shí)間順序?qū)β糜谓?jīng)過進(jìn)行了細(xì)致的描述。

需要修改的地方：

①visit 改為around。show sb. around 意為“帶領(lǐng)某人參觀……”。

②a plenty of 去掉a。短語(yǔ)plenty of 意為“足夠的，大量，很多”。

③去掉介詞from。因?yàn)閠here 是副詞，其前面無需使用介詞。

評(píng)分：

按照中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分20 分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得17 分。