Facing Setbacks with a Smile

本期點(diǎn)評名師

陳傳光男，江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)高級教師、連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁、江蘇省教育學(xué)會會員，從事教育工作15年：曾獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎、班主任基本功大賽市一等獎：有多篇論文在各主流和核心期刊上發(fā)表;曾指導(dǎo)學(xué)生在各類競賽中取得不錯的成績，有多人獲得省級獎和地市級獎。

Facing Setbacks with a Smile

I love singing very much and I entered a singing competition last year. Every personaround me said， "You are a talent. You will sure① become a great singer when you grow up.Therefore， I had confident② in myself. I thought I would at least reach the finals. However，there were too many competitors who sang much better than me. I was knocked out in the firstround. I couldn' t help cry③ sadly.

But my parents told me not to cry. "You should dry your tears. Be brave and keepsmiling." They were right. Failure is not the end of the world. What matters is how to face itcorrectly. Face setbacks with a smile and then you'll successful④ in the near future.

江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)陸文凱

1.優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文記敘了小作者參加唱歌比賽遭遇挫折的經(jīng)歷，文章最后點(diǎn)明主題：要微笑面對挫折方能取得成功。整篇文章文字流暢，用詞得當(dāng)，是一篇不錯的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2.需要修改的地方：

①sure改為surely。修飾動詞become，要使用副詞surely。

②confident改為conficlence。have后接名詞。

③cry改為crying。can't help doing sth.意為“禁不住做某事”。

④successful改為be successful或succeed。will后應(yīng)接動詞原形。

3.評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得23分。