魔 法 洞

廣東 袁丹純

阿拉斯加州一個(gè)小女孩彭妮進(jìn)入了一個(gè)神秘的森林，她跳進(jìn)了森林里的魔法洞，來到了暖和的沙灘邊……

難詞探意

1. suck /s?k/ v. 吮吸；啜；吸

2. twig /tw?ɡ/ n. 細(xì)枝；嫩枝

3. spin /sp?n/ v. （使）快速旋轉(zhuǎn)；急轉(zhuǎn)彎；疾馳

Penny was a little girl who lived in Alaska. It was ice-cold there. She kept praying that she could play in green and warm gardens like we do. But of course, she couldn't.

Her father, like all the men there, didn't have a job. He hunted seals and caught fishes, as was the custom. So her father hadn't even heard of money and even if he had money, there weren't any aeroplanes to take them abroad.

Near Penny's house was a deep, dark forest.Everyone was afraid to enter it. They said that whoever entered it would be sucked in by a magic hole.

One day, Penny was playing with her Eskimo friends when one of the boys shouted, “Hey, I dare one of you to enter the magic forest.”

No one dared. Penny picked up a twig and threw it at the edge of the forest. Nothing happened.Penny felt astonished. “It's all a legend! We can play hide-and-seek in the woods if we want,” she thought. She walked slowly towards the woods. It was getting colder and colder as she took each step.She walked right into the middle of the forest.

There was a small hill with a great big hole right in the middle of it. She wanted to jump into it.She took a big, deep breath and jumped.

There was a sinking feeling in her stomach. She realized that she was falling down deep somewhere. But she did not land. Her head was spinning and suddenly all her fur clothes disappeared and there was a skirt and blouse instead of them. She was at the beach.

She found that she had a bag with her. Inside the bag there was a swimsuit, a mat, a book, a bottle of lotion（護(hù)膚液） and a towel. She took all these home.

Ⅰ. Difficult sentences

1. Even if he had money, there weren't any aeroplanes to take them abroad.

譯文：就算他有錢了，也不會(huì)有飛機(jī)載他們出國(guó)。

分析：本句中的even if表示“即使”的意思，引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。take sb to some place意為“帶某人去某地”。

2. They said that whoever entered it would be sucked in by a magic hole.

譯文：他們說無論誰(shuí)進(jìn)入森林，都會(huì)被魔法洞吸進(jìn)去。

分析：本句的that引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句，whoever引導(dǎo)主語(yǔ)從句。

Ⅱ. Useful expressions

Expressions for emotion

1. She kept praying that she could play in green and warm gardens like we do.

2. Everyone was afraid to enter it.

3. No one dared.

4. Penny felt astonished.

5. She took a big, deep breath and jumped.

6. There was a sinking feeling in her stomach.

Expressions for environment

1. It was ice-cold there.

2. It was getting colder and colder as she took each step.

3. There was a small hill with a great big hole right in the middle of it.

Ⅲ. Pattern to learn

Near Penny's house was a deep, dark forest.

分析：“表示地點(diǎn)的介詞詞組+謂語(yǔ)+主語(yǔ)”是一個(gè)倒裝的表達(dá)，強(qiáng)調(diào)了地點(diǎn)狀語(yǔ)。

仿寫：那座小教堂矗立在山頂上。

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。Paragraph 1:

When she almost stepped out of the forest, she heard her family crying._____________________

Paragraph 2:

However, Penny didn't say.________________________________________________________

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、分析語(yǔ)篇，理清要素

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密，必須充分了解所給材料的大意。 本文是一篇

記敘文，文章分析如下：

二、閱讀續(xù)寫開頭語(yǔ)，展開合理想象

我們可以基于標(biāo)題、原文本和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)。 這一構(gòu)思分為四步：

第一步，根據(jù)已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的首句 “When she almost stepped out of the forest, she heard her family crying.”， 我們可以推測(cè)出Penny跳進(jìn)魔法洞，來到了溫暖的沙灘后，又平安回到了現(xiàn)實(shí)中的家。 前文沒有交代她的旅程經(jīng)過、 感受和收獲， 接下來或會(huì)有所交代。 從續(xù)寫第二段的首句“However,Penny didn't say.”可以看出，續(xù)寫第一段中Penny的家人——爸爸應(yīng)該詢問了她一些關(guān)于本趟旅程的問題，但是她沒有回答。 故事的開頭介紹了Penny家里沒有錢，不能出國(guó)，而她向往著溫暖的地方。 故事的轉(zhuǎn)折處在于她掉進(jìn)一個(gè)神奇的洞，來到了溫暖的沙灘邊，實(shí)現(xiàn)了自己的愿望。 那么接下來，Penny會(huì)不會(huì)利用這個(gè)魔法洞來改善自己、家庭或者其他人的生活呢？譬如開發(fā)旅游景點(diǎn)，或是到沙灘上賣魚掙錢等，由此體現(xiàn)主人翁Penny的勇敢與智慧的故事主題。

第二步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句“When she almost stepped out of the forest, she heard her family crying.”進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思：

（1）Why did her family cry?

（2）How did her family react after seeing Penny's arrival?

（3）What would her family ask Penny?

（4）How would Penny react?

第三步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段必須寫什么。

分析一下第二段所給出的段首句“However, Penny didn't say.”，我們可以推斷續(xù)寫第一段中家人詢問她的奇特歷程，譬如經(jīng)歷了什么、感受如何、有什么收獲等。如此安排，確保兩段之間銜接合理、情節(jié)連貫。

第四步，圍繞題目“A magic hole”的線索及段首句“However, Penny didn't say.”進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思：

（1）How would Penny take advantage of the big hole?

（2）What would be affected by the big hole?

（3）What would be the ending?

三、潤(rùn)色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意“續(xù)”的原則，做到主題、情節(jié)、語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格一致。 具體如下：

（1）通過分析，我們可知本文的主題是弘揚(yáng)積極、正面的價(jià)值觀，如勇敢、智慧等，續(xù)寫時(shí)應(yīng)注意結(jié)局的設(shè)計(jì)；

（2）續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)和前面的開始和發(fā)展吻合，根據(jù)人物的性格特點(diǎn)進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測(cè)；

（3）前文中有多處心理描寫和環(huán)境描寫，且用了大量的賓語(yǔ)從句、一些倒裝句和定語(yǔ)從句，續(xù)寫時(shí)應(yīng)關(guān)注并模仿這些語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格。

（4）續(xù)寫時(shí)注意句型長(zhǎng)短相間，注意句型豐富，注意語(yǔ)法、用詞、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)的準(zhǔn)確性。