My School

陳傳光 男，江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)高級教師，從事教育工作逾15年。江蘇省教育學(xué)會會員，連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁，曾榮獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎，班主任基本功大賽市一等獎。有多篇論文在各主流和核心期刊上發(fā)表。指導(dǎo)學(xué)生在各類競賽中取得了優(yōu)異成績，多人獲得省級、地市級獎。

My school is very beautiful. There are lots of beautiful flowers and trees in my school but① it is always clean and tidy. There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. classes on the playground and we often do sports there. Our teaching building has five floors. My classroom is on the fifth floor. It is big and tidy. The computer rooms are on the third floor. There is a big library on the second floor. There are many books in the library. I often read books there. There are some music rooms and art rooms in the teaching building， too. The teachers in our school are very kind. The students are very nice and smart. I love my school， because its my the② second home.

江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)七（5）班 吳甜甜

點評

1. 優(yōu)點：

校園是我們每個人都再熟悉不過的了，我們在這里學(xué)習(xí)，也收獲知識和友誼。在本文中，小作者首先向我們介紹了學(xué)校的整體環(huán)境，接著又介紹了操場及教學(xué)樓，最后點明學(xué)校是第二個家。本文用詞得當(dāng)、條理清晰，是一篇優(yōu)秀的習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①but改為and。上下文是并列關(guān)系。

②the去掉。序數(shù)詞前有形容詞性物主代詞my修飾，刪掉the。

3. 評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得22分。