一碗面，一份感悟

江西贛州南康區(qū)第三中學(xué) 江海連

一個晚上，作者與母親爭吵后沖出家門,出門后她才意識到手機和錢都沒有帶……

難詞探意

1. steaming /?sti?m??/ adj. 冒熱氣的

2. sigh /sa?/ v. 嘆氣

That night, I quarreled with my mother, and then stormed out of the house. While on the road, I remembered that I did not have any money in my pocket, I did not even take my cellphone with me to make a call home.

At the same time, I went through a noodle shop, and I suddenly felt very hungry. I wished for a bowl of noodles,but I had no money!

The seller saw me standing before the counter and asked, “Hey little girl, you want to eat a bowl?”

“But...but I do not carry money...” I shyly replied.“Okay, I'll treat you,” the seller said. “Come in, I will cook you a bowl.” A few minutes later the owner brought me a bowl of steaming noodles. After eating some pieces, I cried.

“What is it?” he asked.

“Nothing. I am just touched by your kindness! ” I said as I wiped my tears. “Even a stranger on the street gives me a bowl of noodles, but my mother, after a quarrel, chased me out of the house. She is cruel! ”

The seller sighed, “Girl, why did you think so? Think again. I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you felt that way. Your mother has been taking care of you since you were little, why were you not grateful and why did you hurt your mom?”

I was really surprised after hearing that.

Why didn't I think of that? A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel grateful. My mother has raised me since I was little but I have never felt so, not even a little. I thought she was supposed to take care of me and love me. I decided that I should go home as soon as possible because someone was waiting for me.

Language Study

Useful sentence pattern

I thought she was supposed to take care of me and love me.

分析:be supposed to do...意為“應(yīng)該……”。

仿寫:你本該在一小時前就到這兒！

Reading Check

閱讀短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意:

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Paragraph 1:

Meanwhile, many memories came back into my mind.

Paragraph 2:

When arriving home, I saw my mother sitting at the dinner table, worried and tired.

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、析語篇，理要素

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給短文之間邏輯連貫，我們必須理解所給材料的大意。 本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下:

二、閱讀續(xù)寫開頭語，展開合理想象

基于原文本和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，采用圍繞中心提相關(guān)問題的方法，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)，一般分為四步:

第一步，根據(jù)給出的文本判斷文章的立意。

讀完文章可知，作者因為和母親吵架而離家出走，在一家面店里，老板的一碗面和一番話讓她感觸頗深。 這是一個和母愛有關(guān)的故事。

第二步，根據(jù)所給段首句推斷應(yīng)該續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容。

分析第一段的段首句可知，續(xù)寫第一段要寫作者與她母親相處的相關(guān)回憶。 根據(jù)第二段的段首句可知，第二段續(xù)寫應(yīng)適當(dāng)描寫作者回到家看到的場景、心理活動、與母親的對話，以及悔悟后的相關(guān)行動。

第三步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進行提問構(gòu)思:

(1)What kind of memories may come back to the author's mind?

(2)How will the author feel when recalling those memories?

(3)What will the author do?

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進行提問構(gòu)思:

(1)How will the author feel when she sees her mother?

(2)What will her mother say?

(3)How will the author react to her mother's words?

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意行文連貫，各部分內(nèi)容相銜接，即:1. 兩段的續(xù)寫與所給短文的銜接；2. 每段的續(xù)寫與續(xù)寫段首句之間的銜接；3. 續(xù)寫的兩段之間的銜接。