陜西寶雞市姜譚高級(jí)中學(xué) 呂 品
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1.precious/'pre??s/adj.寶貴的;珍貴的
2.hoarse/h??s/adj.嘶啞的
When I was ten,I was suddenly faced with the suffering of moving from the home that I loved.My life spent in that big old house with laughter and tears of my family was precious for me.
When the final day came,I ran to the small backyard and sat alone with tears in my eyes.Suddenly I felt a hand on my shoulder.I looked up to see my grandfather. “I know it isn't easy for you,” he said softly,sitting down on the steps beside me.
“Grandpa,” I replied,“how can I say goodbye to you and all my friends?”
For a moment he just stared off into the apple trees.
“Goodbye is such a sad word,”he said.“It seems too cold for friends to use.We have so many ways of saying goodbye and they all have one thing in common.We all say it with sadness.Come with me,”he whispered.
We walked hand in hand to his favorite place in the front yard.There were lots of roses.My grandpa pulled me close and said,“It isn't the roses that are beautiful,Billy.It's that special place in your heart that makes them so.”
His eyes met mine again.“Billy,I had planted these roses before your mother came to the world.I put them into the soil the day my first son was born.It was my way of showing gratitude for life.That boy's name was David.I used to watch him pick roses for his mother.”
I saw my grandfather's tears.I had never seen him cry before.His voice became hoarse.
Language Study
Useful expressions for creating a novel
1.expressions for describing emotions
with laughter and tears 充滿歡笑和淚水
too cold for friends to use 對(duì)朋友使用來說太冷漠了
with sadness 帶著悲傷
become hoarse 變得嘶啞
2.expressions for describing behaviour
run to the small backyard 跑到小小的后院
sit alone 獨(dú)自坐著
feel a hand on my shoulder 感覺有只手放在我的肩膀上
look up to see 抬頭看
walk hand in hand 手拉著手走
3.other useful expressions
say softly 輕聲說
show gratitude to sb for sth 因某事對(duì)某人表示感謝
Reading Check
閱讀上面的短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。
Paragraph 1:
“One day a terrible war came,and my son,like so many sons,said goodbye to fight a great evil.___________________________________
Paragraph 2:
A year and a half later,my grandfather became seriously ill._______________________.
寫作導(dǎo)引
一、析語篇,理要素
在續(xù)寫這篇文章時(shí)要注意以下幾個(gè)方面,具體請(qǐng)看下面的審題分析。
在續(xù)寫時(shí),要注意通過“我的爺爺”的外貌、動(dòng)作、語言、心理、神態(tài)進(jìn)行描寫,這些描寫也是分析記敘文中人物形象的重要切口。
二、創(chuàng)情節(jié),巧構(gòu)思
由于第一段提到了“一場(chǎng)可怕的戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)來臨了”,顯然在戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)中所發(fā)生的事情,就成為故事的關(guān)鍵所在。第二段提到了“一年半后,我祖父病重”,這提示同學(xué)們?cè)诶m(xù)寫時(shí)要將情節(jié)和“say goodbye”聯(lián)系起來。
在寫本篇短文的讀后續(xù)寫時(shí),同學(xué)們要始終把握“爺爺對(duì)生活的熱愛”這一主題,圍繞“爺爺身邊所發(fā)生的事情”構(gòu)建情節(jié),凸顯愛的傳遞。