2017年12月大學(xué)英語四級考試作文評析（一）

賈從永

Directions：For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on how to best handle the relationship between parents and children. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

2017年12月大學(xué)英語四級考試的三道作文試題屬于解決問題型作文，這種類型作文題目一般是how to...，即要求考生闡述如何解決某個問題。此類型作文議論的成分不多，更接近于說明文。比如，本題請考生闡述如何處理（handle）家長與孩子之間的關(guān)系。既然是handle，那就是說如今家長和孩子之間的關(guān)系存在一些問題，需要提出一些應(yīng)對之策。所以，本文的重點是列舉出一些改善親子關(guān)系的方法。

本文宜寫成三個段落。引言段指出積極的親子關(guān)系對孩子的身心健康非常重要，或指出如今家長和孩子的關(guān)系出現(xiàn)了一些問題，然后指出改善親子關(guān)系需要家長和孩子的共同努力。主體段闡述改善親子關(guān)系的種種方法，這是文章的重心。我們在引言段中已經(jīng)指出改善親子關(guān)系需要雙方的共同努力，所以主體不妨從兩個方面展開闡述：一方面，家長應(yīng)該主動改善與孩子的關(guān)系，家長應(yīng)該從繁忙的工作中抽出時間陪伴孩子，讓孩子感受到家長的關(guān)心和重視;另一方面，孩子也可以采取一些行動來改善與家長的關(guān)系，比如，孩子可以在特殊的日子送給家長一件禮物或者經(jīng)常幫助家長做家務(wù)等，這能夠讓家長知道孩子對家長心存感激。本文可以用預(yù)測法結(jié)尾：雖然健康的親子關(guān)系也難免有爭執(zhí)，但只要家長和孩子共同努力，一定能夠解決分歧，享受一起度過的時光。下面請看范文：

As is known to all， a positive parent-child relationship is conducive to the physical and mental growth of children. However， maintaining a healthy parent-child bond needs the effort of both parties.

Parents should take the initiative to improve their relationship with the children. Of paramount importance is spending quality time with their children， however tight their schedule is. For instance， they can eat meals together， go to sporting events together or watch their children’s favorite TV show together. This can go a long way to making their children feel safe and loved. Children， on the other hand， should let their parents know they are appreciative of what their parents have done for them. For example， they can give their parents a gift on some special day or help with housework on a regular basis.

No healthy parent-child relationship is without conflict. But as long as parents and children make a concerted effort， they can resolve the conflict and enjoy their time together. （162 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. As is known to all， a positive parent-child relationship is conducive to the physical and mental growth of children. 眾所周知，積極的親子關(guān)系有助于孩子的身心成長。be conducive to 有助于，有益于。

2. However， maintaining a healthy parent-child bond needs the effort of both parties. 然而，保持健康的親子關(guān)系需要雙方的共同努力。

3. Parents should take the initiative to improve their relationship with the children. 家長應(yīng)主動改善與孩子的關(guān)系。take the initiative to do sth 主動做某事。

4. Of paramount importance is spending quality time with the children， however tight their schedule is. 最重要的是和孩子一起度過寶貴時光，無論他們的日程安排有多么緊。of paramount importance 最重要的。這個介詞短語在句中作表語，放在句首是為了強調(diào)。quality time 優(yōu)質(zhì)時間，寶貴時光。

5. This can go a long way to making their children feel safe and loved. 這大大有助于讓孩子感到安全和被愛。go a long way to/towards doing sth 大大有助于做某事。

6. Children， on the other hand， should let their parents know they are appreciative of what their parents have done for them. 另一方面，孩子應(yīng)該讓父母知道自己對父母為他們所做的一切心存感激。be appreciative of 感激，感謝。

7. But as long as parents and children make a concerted effort， they can resolve the conflict and enjoy their time together. 但是只要家長和孩子共同努力，他們就能夠解決分歧，享受共同度過的時光。make a concerted effort 共同努力。