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[試題呈現(xiàn)]
假設(shè)你是李華,曾在美國學(xué)習(xí)半年,現(xiàn)已回國。你想聯(lián)系你的美國老師Mr. Smith,但沒有其聯(lián)系方式。請根據(jù)以下要點給你的美國同學(xué)Tom寫一電子郵件:
1. 感謝Tom對你英語學(xué)習(xí)的幫助;
2. 詢問Mr. Smith 的近況并索要其聯(lián)系方式;
3. 邀請Tom在春節(jié)期間來中國感受中國文化。
注意:1. 詞數(shù)120~150;
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)。
[審題]
1. 體裁:電子郵件。
2. 時態(tài):一般現(xiàn)在/過去/將來時。
3. 人稱:第一人稱。
4. 結(jié)構(gòu)
開始稱呼和問候。
接著是正文(The Body)部分:
因為你是主動寫電子郵件給別人,首先就要表明你的意圖,如I am writing to you for ...,Im writing in reference to ...;
理順要點,防止漏寫、亂寫以保證內(nèi)容的完整性,然后將理順的要點完整地表達出來;
有效銜接,串句成篇。正確地選用關(guān)聯(lián)詞,如however,whats more,and,but,first,then,after等,使文章過渡自然、流暢;
正文最后還要寫上感謝收信人的禮貌用語,如Thank you for ...及I look forward to hearing from you。
最后是結(jié)束語,如Yours truly,Yours respectfully,Yours sincerely,Yours faithfully等。
5. 表達
要凸顯文章亮點,增加得高分機會,還要考慮到語言表達的多樣性:既要使用簡單句,也要使用復(fù)合句、并列句;措辭要講究,既要使用普通詞語,也要使用高級詞匯。
習(xí)作 (麻城三中 胡敏)
Dean Tom,
Im li Hua. Do you still remember me? I studied in your school for six months a couple of months ago.
Im very grateful for your help that you gave me when I studied there. It was you who gave me a hand when I got in trouble. Without your help, my English couldnt have been improved so quickly and I couldnt have enjoyed myself so much. Do you know how everything is going on with Mr. Smith? I failed to get in touch with him after I left America. I will be very thankful if you could offer me his e-mail or telephone number.
I know that you show great interest in Chinese culture, dont you? Therefore, I feel honored to invite you to visit our country during the Spring Festival to feel our culture. Im firmly convinced that it will be an unforgettable trip. I will be very happy if you can accept my invitation.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely yours,
Li Huaendprint