I’m Crazy About Cartoons

Do you like cartoons？ I am crazy about cartoons because they are very interesting and cartoon music listens① really great. I have a great time when I watch the cartoon films.

When I was a child， my mother and my grandmother showed me some cartoon books. When I was four years old， I could watch cartoons on TV and② I didnt understand them at all. When I was eight years old， I could understand some of the words in the cartoons. So I could understand lots of animals and people in the cartoons. Now， I am crazy with③ cartoons. I read comics and watch cartoon films during my holidays. I like drawing. So I want to draw people in the cartoons. I think I can draw them good④.

1. 優(yōu)點：

如今，喜愛動畫的中學生越來越多，小作者許晴也不例外。她是一個動畫迷，動畫幾乎一直陪伴著她的成長，陪她度過了一個美好的童年。小作者十分喜歡動畫并想用畫筆把動畫人物記錄下來。全文行文流暢、用詞得當、思路清晰，是一篇不錯的學生習作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①listens改為sounds。此處是系表結構，sound是系動詞，意為“聽起來”，great是形容詞做表語。

②and改為but。上下文是轉折關系。

③with改為about。be crazy about意為“對……著迷”。

④good改為well。修飾動詞draw應使用副詞well。

3. 評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分20分的評分標準，本文修改前可得17分。