The Happiest Day
黃麗蓉老師點(diǎn)評(píng):
春日游,杏花吹滿頭,陽春三月,正是去擁抱自然的季節(jié)。碧水藍(lán)天,草長(zhǎng)鶯飛,少年們正在杏花微雨里植樹。汗水與泥水混雜,笑臉和綠葉輝映。困難和泥濘終將被踩在腳下,希望和綠色終將在藍(lán)天下蓬勃!該篇作文脈絡(luò)清晰,重點(diǎn)突出,筆觸細(xì)膩生動(dòng),用詞精巧,是一篇非常好的記敘文!
On Mar. 22nd, we went to Shuiyun Valley to plant trees with the volunteers of the Lion Club.
The ride was about one hour. Unluckily, it began to rain when we got there. The rain got heavier and heavier, so we sheltered ourselves in a tent. Two hours later, the rain stopped, and we were led to a hill.
At the foot of the hill were some spades and saplings. We carried them up the hill. They were so heavy that we couldn’t walk very fast. Finally, we arrived at the top where a farmer taught us how to plant trees. First, we need to dig a deep hole. Next, put a tree in the hole and make it stand straight, then cover it with soil. I couldn’t wait to try, so I picked up a spade and started working.
It wasn’t such an easy job as it might look like, because the spade was very heavy. It took me about 15 minutes to finish planting the first tree. The following ones were much easier because I was becoming more and more experienced. When I finished the eighth one, the rain started again. We kept on working in raincoats.
Finally, we finished planting all the trees. We were very happy and proud, though we were feeling tired and hungry! Then we made our way down the hill and were back at that tent where dinner was soon served. We had chicken, fish, bamboo shoots[竹筍]and green peppers[青椒]. They were delicious.
After dinner, we were given some lovely presents by a farmer—a pot with a sunflower and a small bottle of honey! We said goodbye and hit the road back.
This was the happiest day I’ve ever had!
東莞明日書院 七年級(jí) 李宜銳
黃麗蓉老師點(diǎn)評(píng):
小作者運(yùn)用精確生動(dòng)的語言記錄了自己成長(zhǎng)過程中最快樂的一天——一次非常特殊的植樹經(jīng)歷,令人印象深刻,如臨其境。