【欄目要求】

1. 將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績； 2. 在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號；

3. 根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由； 4. 給學生習作點評<優(yōu)點與不足>；

5. 請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、 職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

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來稿請寄： 430079 華中師范大學外國語學院《中學生英語》 雜志社 收

本期點評名師

姜經志 男，中學英語高級教師，省級骨干教師，淮北市優(yōu)秀教師，中國外語學習研究會會員，《學英語》、《英語周報》特約編輯、《中學生英語》兼職編委。多年來，在省級以上報刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎。曾主編《初中生英語滿分作文大全》、《英語奧林匹克》、《新目標英語八年級暑假作業(yè)》，參編《高中英語知識點反饋與閱讀》、《初中英語題典大全》、《21世紀英語學習指南》、《初中英語新作文》、《中學生英語水平測試》等10余冊，輔導學生30余人次在國家和省級英語競賽中獲獎。

An Embarrassing Morning

I had a bad morning. First of all， I was late for school. My head teacher Mr. Li was very angry with me. The second class was math. The teacher asked me to hand out① my homework when I realized that I had forgotten② it in my bedroom. I had to say sorry to my math teacher. After class， Mr. Li asked me to go to his office. When I went into the office， I was nearly knocked down by another teacher whom③ was in a hurry. I was very embarrassed. Mr. Li was angry with me because④ my carelessness. I felt very sorry.

What an embarrassing morning！

安徽省濉溪縣四鋪中心學校九（2）班 惠琳

1. 優(yōu)點：

小作者描寫了自己經歷的尷尬的早上，用詞準確，表達生動，語意連貫，而且能熟練運用復雜的句式如定語從句等。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① hand out 改為hand in。hand out意為“分發(fā)”；表示“上交”應用hand in。

② forgotten改為left。forget 表示忘記了某事物或忘了要做的事；leave 表示把某物遺忘在某地了。

③whom 改為who。關系代詞在定語從句中作主語，應用who，而不能用whom。

④because改為because of。because表示“因為”時只用作連詞，引導原因狀語從句；because of意為“因為”，相當于一個介詞，后接名詞、動名詞或代詞構成表示原因的短語。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分20分的標準，本文修改前可得18分。

出生日期：2001年11月12日

愛好：唱歌

座右銘：自信是成功的第一秘訣。

就讀學校：江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學初三（5）班

指導老師：王桂馨

My Favourite Film Star

My favourite film star is Kim Soo Hyun. He is famous all over the world.

Kim Soo Hyun was born on 16 February， 1988. He was born in Seoul， South Korea. In 2007， he started acting. He is tall and handsome. He is an experienced actor and he is good at singing and dancing.

Since his first scene play The Pickled Cheese Smile， Kim Soo Hyun has acted in many successful films and dramas， including Dream High in 2011， Secretly Greatly in 2013， My Love from the Star in 2013. He won several international awards such as the Award for Best New Actor at the Korean Grand Bell Awards in 2013. He also won an Award for Best Actor from the Seoul International Film Festival in 2014.

Kim Soo Hyun is considered by many people as a superstar. I believe his acting skills will be even better in the future.An English Corner

Our class wants to hold an English Corner. I made a survey to see how my classmates think about it. Most of them think it is a good idea， but 30% of them don’t.

Some think the English Corner can make their school life more colorful. They can also learn something new. What’s more， they can practise their oral English there. But others don’t think so. They say they have too much homework to do. They have little time for the English Corner. Some of them are not good at expressing their own ideas in English， so they don’t want to speak English at all.

In my opinion， we should have such an English Corner. If we are not good at speaking English， we should practise more.

出生日期：2000年11月12日

愛好：唱歌

座右銘：自信是成功的第一秘訣。

就讀學校：江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學初三（5）班

指導老師：王桂馨