My Classmate

【欄目要求】

1. 將學(xué)生習(xí)作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績(jī)； 2. 在應(yīng)該修改的地方劃線并標(biāo)注序號(hào)；

3. 根據(jù)所標(biāo)序號(hào)進(jìn)行修改并說明修改的理由； 4. 給學(xué)生習(xí)作點(diǎn)評(píng)lt；優(yōu)點(diǎn)與不足gt；；

5. 請(qǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)名師提供簡(jiǎn)歷一份，包括：學(xué)校、職務(wù)、 職稱、榮譽(yù)、教研教學(xué)成果、照片一張。

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石宇 男，山東省梁山縣楊營(yíng)中學(xué)一級(jí)教師，濟(jì)寧市優(yōu)秀教師，濟(jì)寧市教學(xué)能手，梁山縣優(yōu)秀班主任；曲阜師范大學(xué)英語系畢業(yè)，多年擔(dān)任畢業(yè)班的英語教學(xué)，取得了優(yōu)異成績(jī)；輔導(dǎo)的學(xué)生在山東省2012年初中生英語競(jìng)賽中榮獲一等獎(jiǎng)；在國(guó)家級(jí)、省級(jí)報(bào)刊上發(fā)表教學(xué)論文多篇。

Li Hua is one of my classmates. We are good friends. Li Hua is kind and warm-hearted. When somebody in her class falls ill， she goes to attend to him or her. When someone has trouble at① his study， Li Hua always helps him with his lessons. As I am not able to knit a sweater， she lends to② me a hand. When classes are over， she is always the first to clean the blackboard. When an old man or woman has difficulty in walking upstairs， she goes to support him or her. In a word， whenever someone is in need， she never stands by.

Although she is so fat， she is still quick in action and full with③ energy. You can often see her on our playground， either playing basketball or volleyball. Sometimes， I make fun of her by saying， “You’d better to④ play football as a gatekeeper.” She just laughed it off.

She always says， “Being lovely makes a person pretty.” I think that it is true of Li Hua since she is such a girl.

山東梁山楊營(yíng)中學(xué)七年級(jí) 吳娛

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文是介紹自己同學(xué)的文章，小作者通過列舉事實(shí)強(qiáng)調(diào)同學(xué)李華對(duì)其他同學(xué)和老師的熱情和友好，體現(xiàn)了她的善良和樂于助人的品質(zhì)。本文結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，層次分明，過渡自然，是一篇值得推薦的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① at改為in。have trouble in doing sth.意為“做……有困難”；

② 去掉to。lend sb. sth.意為“借給……”；

③ with改為of。be full of意為“充滿……”；

④ 去掉to。had better后加動(dòng)詞原形。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得12分。