我的校園生活

李池紅

學(xué)校的生活是豐富多彩的，同學(xué)們每天都會(huì)參予各種活動(dòng)。那么，你的校園生活是什么樣的呢？下面就請(qǐng)你以自己的校園生活為主題寫(xiě)一篇作文。要求：60~80詞左右。

My School Life

Every day, I get up at 6:10. I have breakfast at 6:20. Then I go to school on foot.

My schoolstartat 6:45. I like English best. Because I like my English teacher very much. She is Miss Yu. Her full name isYu Xiu Rong. She is tall and smart. I study maths well. I oftenhalpmy friends. I like PEvery muchtoo. We play football. We are happy. After class, we play games. They are fun.

My schoollife endat 4:40. My school life isfun.

老師說(shuō)：這位同學(xué)描述了自己一天的校園生活。我們來(lái)分析一下他的作文。首先start應(yīng)該加s，學(xué)校是一個(gè)整體，應(yīng)該用第三人稱(chēng)單數(shù)形式；Yu Xiu Rong是他老師的名字，姓的第一個(gè)字母需要大寫(xiě)，名的所有詞要放在一起，而且首字母要大寫(xiě)，應(yīng)改為Yu Xiurong；halp應(yīng)該是“幫助”，屬于單詞書(shū)寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，應(yīng)為help; I like PE very much too.這句話沒(méi)有語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，不過(guò)too與very much表示的意思在這里有些相近，而且very much在前面的句子中出現(xiàn)過(guò)，在英語(yǔ)中應(yīng)該盡量避免重復(fù)使用一個(gè)詞語(yǔ)，可以把very much去掉； 學(xué)校放學(xué)直接用My school ends就可以；通過(guò)前面的敘述可以看出作者在學(xué)校的生活豐富多彩，所以可以說(shuō)成interesting，比f(wàn)un表達(dá)得更具體。

這樣作文看起來(lái)就舒服多了。下面是修改后的文章。

My School Life

Every day, I get up at 6:10. I have breakfast at 6:20. Then I go to school on foot.

My school starts at 6:45. I like English best. Because I like my English teacher very much. She is Miss Yu. Her full name is Yu Xiurong. She is tall and smart. I study maths well. I often help my friends with their maths. I like PE too. We play football on the playground. We are happy. After class, we play games. They are fun.

My school ends at 4:40. How interesting my school life is!